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Discussions about sex => Erotic Stories => Topic started by: Janine Dee on March 17, 2011, 10:57:02 AM
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I had the idea, Bear agreed with it. So here it is. OOC notes can still be posted in thread, but here's a better spot for them.
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Thanks Janine,.. figured it best to lay it out in the open an idea, rather than work on something, that others might be considering... my character... ... a halfbreed,..of elven and human blood,.. burdened with curse,.. and blessing of being a shape shifter... (you'll understand the curse...as I post it)
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Okay, the city, medieval? Tight and my stories seem cooperative, BUT do we want it coastal so sea travel is an easy possibility?
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Doesn't matter to me, I was planning on coming to the city over land.
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I'll be there already on my side... and hope the intro clarifies,... though his intent there is to seek counsel,.. he is not as driven by noble virtue... rather of vengeance. Coastal works...nicely...
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Well with one vote for coastal and the rest don't care I figure we'll have it a coastal city.
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How is things set up? Is it an empire or a large kingdom? I was kinda thinking of smaller city states and kingships which could be squabbling, fight small wars, making treaties, alliances and everything else politicians can play with. I though about a structure like this because Janine's been part of a group of mercenaries, Tights an assassin and I'd assume these types of professions would thrive under such circumstances. Hmm though as long as everything in a large kingdom isn't controlled by an iron fist all of this could very well go on inside a kingdom.
The city could be a large coastal city with lots of power and influence because of its location making it a very important trading point.
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Sounds good to me. ;) I'm leaving it loosely defined so we can adjust it on the fly as we wish.
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Sunny > White wicca ,(WITCH) my powers I receive , from energy source, I feed upon happiness and revelry.I`m immortal processor of magical talents practitioner of good and evil. Mystical mercenary, who sells my spells. separated into five castes : warrior , healer,enchantress , conjurer , and seeress > ;D @ Janine Dee I think it`s called Tracing > mostly immortal have the ability for that power ! So great possiblies there ? Warning ::: To those that look down into my bewitching green eyes ! > Evil laugh < hehehehehe ! SEEMS I SCREWED UP AGAIN !
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Okay Sunny honey, but posting it here only does so much. You need to join in the story in the other thread. :)
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Just to (re)state what I had in mind for this thread is that we each start our own story. In this case revolving around this central city (though you can certainly be elsewhere if you wish), and as we go we can start working threads together if we find ourselves wanting to, but it's not MANDATORY. Just write your own fantastic, erotic tale, and let it go where it goes.
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Well I like the idea of a large coastal city. Plays to some variety of actions then, if we are weaving our own story lines then...
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I'll post tomorrow... I've written some now but I need to re-read it.
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As my character is sent by a political power, the bortherhood not a secret society, but active in daily and political life, the land torn up into little city-states and kigdoms sounds perfect. The city I was hoping to become a centre of business and trade, wehere all people and cultures meet, collide both passionately as sometimes cruelly.
A coastal city seems to meet all those wishes, so I am more than happy if it developes that way..
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And I like the idea of sea travel being an option. So it looks like more votes for coastal.
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I am on an island ! ;D
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Ummm K ;) Well Bear said he was in the city, and Tight and I are just arriving, and Adera seems good with the city as well. Still, have fun on your island and we'll maybe meet up.
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@ Janine sorry having blonde day ! whats the threads name , and where do I go ?
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http://www.funnyadultgamesplay.com/forum/index.php/topic,947.0.html
here you go Sunny.. not too far away ;)
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Do we have a name for this city?
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What about: Libidinis (Citatum Libidinis, city of lust, latin)
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Ehehe, I guess they'd provide every imaginable sexual thing there, even the most depraved ones the only requirement being money. ::)
No wonder its such a big city, almost everyone would feel that they'd have to come there at least once in their lives. Though such a city would be filled with dangers and horrors too of course.
I'm not very happy with what I've written, I think I'm going to rework it quite a bit before posting since I got a few new ideas which seemed better.
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Oh, sort of a sexual tourist spot... I LIKE it!
And don't worry Sunny. I just thought you wanted to start your character's story on an island.
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Perhaps a gathering of festival...a spring/summer event the celebration in coordination with such reputation.
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Maybe the end of summer, harvest feasts. Abundance of food, drink, the fire and passion of summer running through veins, the weather warm enough for lesser clothing. Dancing on squares, games to play and prices and fame to be gained..
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If anyone has any story based ideas can they post them here because I keep wanting to post more, but everyone keeps coming up with such wonderful ideas and I keep remodeling. :P
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Well I've posted the central themes of my story, a character motivated by revenge, against lycans and his search for the specific demon . The nature of that demon as a collector of souls,... more on that shortly.
I like the festival, summer tends to be a celebration of celestial nature,.. would put a great deal of pressure on the character if the full moon coincides with the festival peak,.. since the nights would be at there shortest for him to operate freely.
The autumn festival, could be be perceived to give religious appeasement of thanks, the nature of humans to give tith to their gods for success of harvest. The sexual nature of the city would certainly make any cultist offering more interesting. So I like those ideas tremendously. From my viewpoint of the characters condition, the extended nights more workable, the crowds in pilgrimage and their extended night frolicong in either case probably enough of a challenge for him to deal with. The festival is either impending, orjust starting... critical events should accumulate with it's peak.
My thoughts,.. if you are looking for quest driven ideas or suggestion to introduce as points of discovery is to visit the Sage at the library of Libidnis, though for a brief span he will be... impaired.... the thread of the shapeshifter will enlighten. The mind is rolling now with the ideas...of Talon's adventures in the city. (I stole this character from a different story I am working on twisted him into this fantasy setting...
Again though,...the underlying concern of the presence of a lycan terrorizing the city has been established... the potential of inter character conflict tremendous... since all they know it still preys.
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The brotherhood sees the festival (summer or fall) as the perfect opportunity to have their minion perform his task. Many people will be attending the festival at Libidnis, many strangers visiting the city. A lone man (he shall remain nameless until he receives his mission) will not draw attention, especially if he is as well trained as this Ranger is.
The brotherhood being the only organisation with wordly power that managed to set foot on the soil of many city-states and kingdoms. Claiming to be neutral, but secretly very active. Sending their agents to invoke revolts, murder nobility and politicians as well as mediate in peace talks, negociate in kidnappings of heiress's. Their own survival their most important interest, yet getting richer and more powerful in the proces becoming more and more an important secundary goal.
I imagine the peak of the festival being the war-games the neighbouring houses will play at the festival. A brutal yet relatively peaceful way of matching strength, giving opportunity to diplomats and nobels to confirm old treaties, make new ones or get into fights. The task of the Ranger will lay there, the son of the Prefect/King/ Steward (female characters not excluded) of Libidnis the target. Motives yet to be revealed will show what his role is in this story and what the true motives of the Brotherhood are...
Getting very excited with all the ideas and the first intro's I have written. I forsee very interesting adventures, the peak of the festival promising some coinciding, major events..
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My character wont have any deep underlying reasons for visiting that city other than her impulsive curiosity.
Still writing though... I had written quite a lot but decided it was no good and started over yesterday.
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Awesome. This is what I was hoping for. A comparing of notes so even if certain paths never cross they can influence. Like if one of us gets in a fight another may see the guardsmen running in that direction, or even use it as a distraction.
While we'll have our own stories I'm liking the idea of them all having the same stage.
For the lycan/war games, how are they impacting the festival? Are people openly aware of the lycan or is the city guard trying to keep it quiet to keep people outside and spending their money?
For the war games... how does it fit into the larger festival? How did a summer festival in a city literally named for it's sexual excesses get war games?
Just my own questions for my story as I write it.
Now, one thought I had for the city is that it's NOT like one large red light district, but rather a sort of REALLY big free love colony. Prostitution is certainly legal, but I see the citizenry as simply VERY comfortable with their sexuality.
If you've read Jaqueline Carey's Kushiel series or Anne Rice's Claiming Beauty you'll get a good picture of what I mean.
As far as Janine the swordswoman... while I'll detail it more in my post I'll put up sometime tonight she's just here for the festival because she had a lover mistake her for a native ;D for her adventure will come by chance. Though with the fellas already kicking around I wouldn't be surprised if paths cross. ;)
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Phew there, now I've posted. Probably wrote a lot of things wrong.
I've got lots of ideas about what I will do at first when I enter the city, lots of impressions and things to learn.
Do they have gladiator games in the city? I guess they could hold competitions between nobles and mighty houses/factions in various war games where heftily payed soldiers and mercenaries put their lives at stake for politics, entertainment, money and glory.
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Well feudal competition often was a chance for displays of swordcraft. So a form of such wouldn't necessarily unusual. A gladiatorial competition? That could be an interesting twist... an interesting potential dilemma with such a chaotic creature as Adera's in the city if animals are used in the games.
As to the Lycan,. my first thoughts were the issue the local authorities had tried to keep such under wrap. An eyewitness exists, ...that issue bound to now to run in rumors. I can't see my character to have been very secretive about his actions in the beginning. Not blatantly open, but bound to have been seen through the months in his cursed form. His drifting, perhaps enough to warrant a legendary tags of his own, Silvermane,... (for the streak of silver on him),..Talon.. in those days the traveling troubadours likely to put their own spin to tales. How such effects your story I leave to you. I see it as a further crisis to his own dealings in the city the longer he lingers there as his tale unwinds,.
I do see the town as more, open minded rather in a constant overall state of debauchery. The festival itself may have further influences..
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Okay, so like the jousts, archery contests, wrestling? I dunno about gladiatorial though, just my opinion, but gladiatorial contests were heavy on the bloodshed. The feeling I'm having for this city is that contests of skill are one thing, but spilling blood and ending at least some lives for the amusement of the populace... I'm not seeing it.
At least not yet, but as long as no one says it doesn't exist it can when someone wants it to. :)
So Bear. There's your shapechanger AND a lycan? Do you think people would be able to tell them apart? Or would it be a case of mistaken identity waiting to happen?
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War games = tournaments.
During the weeks of festivities, a range of tournaments are scheduled for the men to prove their masculinity. Besides knife-throwing, bow-shooting and horsemanship tournaments, 2 special events need to be named. First of all there is the initiation wrestling tournament. Boys that are ready to enter manhood, have been secluded for several weeks, training on a bare mountaintop to prepare for the wrestling matches in the city. The lucky boy who will be declared the winner, will have his choice of girls to become a man in bed as well. But any boy that makes an impression by spirit or posture will sure be a man before the end of the festival. Girls ever present at the matches, looking for a future husband or lover.
The second event worth mentioning, Ludus Vitae (game of life), is a teamsport. 2 teams of 5 men playing on a diamond-shaped field. Goals in the form of eagle’s nests standing on poles at the far ends of the field, a skull the object to score with. In the olden days, the skull used to be the head of the finalist of the year before, as the losing team was killed after the match. In this enlightened city state, a real skull is replaced by a wooden skull and the team that loses gets a ceremonial punishment. A single lash with a flexible stick to the soles of the feet. The winners are rewarded by the Prefect himself. A pouch full of gold coins, free room and board in the whole city during the remainder of the festival, and ofcourse honor and fame for the members of the winning team. Though it is a brutal game, many contesters needing medical attention, the game is loved because there are also nobility teams. A chance to see villagers take on the prince’s and heirs of the kingdom, all equal on the field. Girls offering themselves, exposing their bodies during games. Sometimes ordered to get one team out of focus, sometimes because the heat of the moment takes them under control.
Though most tournaments have a civil character, evolved during the ages from bloody executions of prisoners, to a pure display of skill, Ludus Vitae still demanding casualties. As there are no rules about the physical encounter between men, often broken bones, cuts and tears are the result of an intense clash. Though seldom, fatalities have been reported each year. The reward too high, sparking competative natures, occasionally leading to a clash of bodies where one man does not rise to his feet again.
As there are many teams that want the opportunity to play against the noble teams, pre-qualifying tournaments are held before the festival even starts. On the first night of the official opening of the festival, the first match is played. The winner of the year before against its challenger. All throughout the festival, each night matches are played, the final scheduled in the middle of the festival.
(The game inspired on the game Ja’La dh Jin, found in the books of Terry Goodkind)
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Okay, I can follow you there. It's one thing for thing to get out of hand. With a gladiatorial type of contest at least some death is sort of in the programming, but accidents happening.
As a note we will want to keep in mind, this is also a magical world where healing magic is available. In my story I mention the attack on the observer would have left the man crippled if it weren't for mystic healing. So the games would doubtlessly have healers on hand. it wouldn't' stop EVERYTHING, but it would be a definite factor.
Especially if your ranger is there to assassinate someone. With magic able to heal it would be a factor. I'll admit I'm using my geek girl D&D experience and that even has spells to raise the dead, though they are rare and expensive
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From what I've seen in movies and read in books raising the dead doesn't really work if you really want a person back alive, the ones that have died tend to be a bit strange after the experience of dying. I do however agree that there probably are quite potent healing magic available though the best kind is probably reserved for those that can afford having such magic.
On the assassination note of that I would guess the assassins are taught to take healing magic into consideration and make sure the target is truly dead, they are probably quite prepared against a lot of hindering magic so they can fulfill their task. Hmm the best assassins are probably even prepared for necromancy so they wont even show themselves to their target... if that's part of their objective, it might be a bit bothersome having someone investigating things afterwards if they're raising the dead to ask questions.
Are the tournaments only for men or is it just very rare for any women to enter? I was wondering if a physically able woman like Janine's character can enter into it? The initiation tournaments can of course be exclusively male but then that tournament seems more like a festivity rather than a tournament with a big prize like what the swordsmanship tournament might have. It would be quite fun to somehow end up the position where I would be betting on someone. :P
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@Janine I think one has to consider the nature of this shapeshifter character and realize his limitation. Remembering he was a recluse, his contact in the crowded societies limited to the recent years. To answer your question I see his lcyan form with a distinctive markings, the pronounced silver streak in the mane,.. the chest wound of the hell hound, such wounds created and occurring by the supernatural beings on his lycan form, healing but marring his features. So yes, an acute observer could make that distinction.
Who pays such close attention to the details when locked in absolute fear?
He has killed what he thought to be the creature responsible..., is it the only one?..., In my tale the answer would be no. Borrowing a bit from Supernatural series... as sideline issues in his quest of revenge as this tale weaves forward.
I think that prior observations of him, that the killings stopped, and his sightings in other towns where killings occur would link him more as a culprit then hero. "Silvermane" would be that tale you teach your kids to scare the crap out of them when you want them to stay indoors at night.
Reanimation of the dead always intriguing,... really depends on how deep a story and world you wish to create here, or keep it in the general loose framework of D & D. The reality of war games to the death, reserved for settling the extreme conflicts in lieu of absolute war. To waste your best warriors otherwise on trivial issues is a mark of a more barbaric society, I have a hard time seeing this city as such. Certainly personal stakes could be raised.
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In D&D the raising of the dead has two forms. One is more like the Biblical Lazarus, and that is done by a Cleric, a caster of divine magic. There is also the arcane necromancy which returns a semblance of life, and yes disguising ones features would be a definite concern just in the case of communing with the dead.
A solution that was in one of my gaming books had little metal hooks that would be inserted in vital organs after the person was killed so if they WERE brought back the hooks were there unless someone thought to check and remove them, and the person would die all over again.
Another out is the magic tended to need at least part of the body, unless REALLY powerful magic was available then disintegrating the remains would be sufficient.
In all cases lower level divine is just healing, and necromancy was just animating zombies and skeletons. The true raising of the dead or the animation of intelligent undead is the realm of the most powerful of magics.
Again, this is all just D&D, but it's been around forever so it's not a bad basis.
For Silvermane... it's sounding like you are looking to be the misunderstood hero. ;) Which is very cool. I don't know if our stories will meet, but I wouldn't mind that, and I needed to know how you wanted to approach it.
For the contests, as I note above healing magic is fairly available, and I see them as a sort of paramedic. Minor injuries would probably just get treated with traditional medicine, but a cleric would probably be on hand at the gaming grounds so if someone needed emergency treatment.
For the participants... they would be expecting males, BUT I don't see them say calling out the guard to keep a woman from participating.
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Hmm I have seen at least 3 lycan in the thread of my story, 2 crucial as to his story..., the theme of the anti-hero definite at work here, but I think it doesn't intensify until the coming of the full moon when he again becomes locked into his cursed form. No doubt with so many warriors mercenaries the bounty placed on him would be a natural diversion of mention in any other thread. I see the nature of the demon to be quite attracted to this city, and the full moon coinciding with the solstice, the natural decadence and a ritualistic orgy,...but for now unlocking the mind of Xegis is his principle task
Note, perhaps not made clear, but my character is in his lycan form 24/7 for 3 days, under the moons influence no matter if it is in the sky of not. A countdown might be needed here, ...with a 28 day cycle,.. the next moon,... 23 days away...or is that too far of a spread?
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Since I never played D&D, I have my references from the many fantasy books I have read, and from Diablo, I and II. The terminology from D&D familiar, the exact effect it has on the characters yet to be discovered.
The Ranger is trained to kill, not to inflict wounds or mere injury. Though a certain specific mission could order him to wound instead. Yet healing, magical or otherwise, suggests the victim is still alive. The Ranger will strike only if he is convinced of succes.His techniques skliled enough to take a life instantly. He will wait for the right opportunity, for as long as needed to perform the task that was put on him to perform. A relentless drive, his full devotion to the Brotherhood ensure him completing his quest or die in the proces of doing so.
Though it is uncommon to see a woman wearing warrior clothing, let alone seeing a female veteran, there is no rule excluding women from tournaments. Especially in archery and knife throwing, women have entered comeptitions and some have been victorious. If Janine would like to enter a swordsman tournament, she'd have to prove her ability. Preventable bloodshed unwanted. But this rule goes for men as well, except soldiers from the city's army. Their enlistment proof enough for being well-trained.
As a stranger to the city, the Ranger will find himself in difficulties. conflicting interests threatening to throw him of his quest. In the secluded monastery, he has not been in contact with many women, only servants in the castle where his vow of celibacy is strictly enforced. Yet, in this frivolous. sexually free city, he encounters women that will control his mind unconsciously. No matter how rigorous his training was, it could not prepare him for the debauchery displayed by some females. It will throw him off balance, his biggest struggle soon to be revealed..
As for resurrecting the dead.. I can see someone being resurrect to perform a certain task or be under someone's control. Not just simply brought back from the dead, to live in a prosperous life. The whole concept of an assasin would be non-existing. Yet, if it were possible to bring someone back, there will be ways of permanently ending someone's life or life a cursed life after being brought back.
Event though I hope more will join us, this is already a huge treat to me.. thanks all for posting your chilling, mesmorising, wonderful stories :D
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And not everyone has played D&D, I'm just using it as a frame of reference... heck I even bought the "Book of Erotic Fantasy" supplement. ;D
The idea is basically that the more grievous the injury the harder it is to heal. Death being REALLY injured. :P Assassins still have a great deal of use, but they either are going after targets that won't have access to those mighty resurrecting magics, or they take steps like disintegrating the body. There is even similar mighty spells that can bind the persons spirit so they can't be brought back.
I'm not saying an assassin has no place, but since we have magic he's going to have to factor that in.
For Silvermane... it's your tale Bear. If anything I could see you keeping a close track of the days. So it certainly fits into the story.
Should we have the festival culminating at that point?
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The fact that theRanger is sent off without any magical skills, and since he does not know yet what his quest will be, it might be a plot twister once he finds out he has been sent on a mission inlike fulfilled. The son of the prefect definately has the necessary magcial powers at his bidding when he needs them.
Knowing magic in different forms in fantasy books, they are usually not as practical as healing spells in Diablo, and I assume in D&D as well. I have learned and hopefully incorporate it in my story the right way.. A learning proces as this is new to me :)
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Hey, part of the fun with this is everyone getting to contribute. It's a literary gumbo.
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I am not certain why the Mircale Max quote tickles me here
Miracle Max: See, there's a big difference between mostly dead, and all dead. Now, mostly dead: he's slightly alive. All dead: well, with all dead, there's usually only one thing that you can do.
Inigo: What's that?
Miracle Max: Go through his clothes and look for loose change.
play with death how you like...
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Had a chance to do some reserch :o hahahaha I picked being a wicca ! lol and they burned them at the stake then ! so how you like your thigh done ! heheheh ! poor joan of ark ! .............. A women were possesions ................ they had to Obey thier husbands........ hate that word ! Wives then use to be beaten into submission ........ GULP ..........But then again , I Secure my life w trade ...... with my healing potions ! hmm they had riding stables then too ! hohohoh YA ! ;D
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In real life, yes the witch was generally treated with a degree of suspicion, ...
In the fantasy realm,. that of D&D, they were clerical in nature, more proactive in the application of the divine spirits rather than worship. Should you choose to play in the thread, the role of healer,... apothecary,..herbalist... a woman of power capable of manipulating the elements is quite within the frame of things. The witch gains her powers from worship, unlike the "natural" mage who is perceived as born with a gift towards magic.
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I'm not going to be all sneaky like some of you, unless I choose to use magic for that to gain something. My bargain with the dwarf was supposed to be quite loud so feel free to notice it even if I might have a hard time noticing one of you as I'm looking at everything and some of you tries to blend in. :P
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Todays wicca is so much different , I`m not kidding ! wicca and witch are`nt the same , The group I belong too well argue that !
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Wicca is actually a fairly modern term that people use for a fairly wide variety of practices. Religiously Wicca wouldn't exist because it's a religion of this world, just like there isn't Christianity or Buddhism. The practices however would certainly be there, and it would be a matter of what you practice Sunny.
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Wicca is an old English term,.. adapted to the modern religious practices. It's original form was in application to a wizard.
Hoping my story isn't too boring at the moment to those looking for more of the erotic... the erotic portion is to wrap in at appropriator points though.
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I don't think you story is boring Bear, you have a lot more weight and purpose in your story rather than mine which is more a vacation in the earthly realm. I can more easily see you, Janine or Tight meeting rather than me as I don't have much of a purpose in my visit other than the fun of it. ::)
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I think we all agree that these are stories first.
And don't see yourself short Adera I'm vacationing as well, but some of the best stories are the ones that just happen.
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For me all the stories are very well written. Once I start reading, I can't stop. Each viewpoint different, each story following a differet path. As Janine stated before and I will repeat, I love it that all characters act on the same stage, unclear if and when they will meet (at all).
This will be my longest story, and seen the length of the stries you guys are writing, this is turning into a book, rather than a short sotry, written by different authors. Finding the quality of the stories very high.
I find myself working on my own story almost every waking hour. Finding new twists to the plot, expanding the background on the characters that I am inventing. Putting down notes whenever I think of something new I want to try and brade into the story. Though it is my first story in a setting like this, I am loving it!!!
And Adera, since the Ranger is losing his footing as his training is crumbling away, the chances that he will meet a pixie, is growing every day ;)
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I just keep imagining in the monastery.
"Is it true no ranger sent to Libidinis has ever returned?"
"It is."
"They all died?"
"No, they just refused to leave."
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Poor monks, they'll have to be stricter with them if they're going to keep expecting celibacy. :P
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Monks : Imagine a place where ! You don`t want to know what`s going through my mind !!! Ok Sunny`s Dark side is being unleashed ! hmm :D
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Haha Janine... Well, Libidinis is Pandorra's box for a Ranger.. But there is a first time for everything. Maybe this Ranger will return...
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I will try to get some time to write later this evening, I would really have liked to write more already but I'm quite busy. I might rewrite my visit to the dress shop, I'd like to develop that some more.
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should make a note...dibs on that gem the dwarf has...
Adera, you keep reminding me the mystical aspect of the city, I keep rewriting my passages,.. torn between a serious story and the chance to play in the non-nonsensical... I keep re-writing looking for that balance.
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I think its good if some tries to keep it a bit serious, makes it all more interesting. I think my story is a bit too light hearted at times.
Btw my character doesn't really see the potential power or whatever in such items like the gem since magic is very normal to her.
I'm sorry if I keep messing things up for you Bear and leave things in my wake that others would fight to get their hands on. :P :-*
Hmm a visit to Erthiathea might give your character information (might be interesting many of you for various reasons) about certain things but you'll have to find out about her first... people doesn't really know about her and her reputation isn't the best either. Then its the problem of getting information from her as well. Btw I should warn you all... if Erthiathea gets angry its like unleashing a force of nature. :P
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Actually, maybe it's time to start working on working each others threads nearer if not together.
Just putting Adera in your story would make it much more lighthearted Bear. Just like it could give your story the direction you seem to be wanting Adera.
Right now I deliberately set myself in a spot where I could branch into other tales. The ladies I'm meeting in the bath might have recognized an experienced sell sword and may introduce me to the guy Tight is supposed to kill so I can then get hired to protect him. ;)
Or they might tell me about the beast hunting the cities streets at the nights of the full moon.
I can also cross paths with Adera, but at this point either she'll have to come to the baths or wait for me to get out of them.
But otherwise I have some ideas I will probably mix in either way, but am also ready to develop on my own.
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The future of Umbra is yet uncertain. The fight in his head between passion and endlessly repeated training not even unleashed. He could go either way. Dive deep into the sexuality/sensuality of Libidinis or stick to his believes and convictions and perform his quest or die..
As he was ordered to stay hidden, an immediate meeting with one of the other characters is purely based on chance.
Though, the chances of all other characters (in the thread now, come on guys, plenty of room for others to join in!!) noticing Umbra is much bigger as the commoner in the streets. Janine for having a trained eye, picking out veterans, trained persons. Adera, the pixie with magical powers would notice him instantly. And the shapeshifter woulf smell him..
He might go through the sotry without crossing paths with anyone, but I find that doubtful...
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I think I will go to the baths. What I'm not sure about is if I'm going to walk around there confidently naked or hide my sex under an illusion or morph it. Not hiding anything would be fun because people would look at me with an initial shock when they see my dick. :P
I don't think direct interaction is needed but at least getting the opportunity to notice each others at times would be fun. I'm afraid Bear and Tight's characters are prone to try and blend by their very nature. Well I'm sure they look really hot but they probably try to not be seen too much considering their situations.
Anyway I might put myself a little on display at times so I can be noticed in the background of your stories. Hmm though if someone recognizes Bear and a chase begins or if Janine gets dragged into some fighting for some reason (well you know the warrior type :P) I can imagine it would be hard to miss things if I was nearby.
@Tight: I guess your character will have a hard time, I can see him fall for the pleasures and temptations offered to him but I think he will still strive to continue his quest anyway. Btw even if I'll notice you I might not see anything suspicious about you since I'm really new to human society and such.
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It will certainly move in thread, but I thought it better to start it here since we're all putting in some truly quality work, and I know I for one didnt' want to just stomp on in.
As far as Adrea and the baths? I dunno, I see Libidinis as a society where bi is actually the norm. So shock would be understandable, but it would likely quickly turn to curiosity.
And for me to meet Umbra... I would basically have to be in the same area. That's why I mentioned possibly being hired on to bring some skill to his personal security.
If we want to weave all the threads together Bear's demon might have a cult, either that Umbra's target is a part of or the Brotherhood itself is a part of.
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h yes a cult is involved, I see the "ritual of fire" as solstice event, in this matter, a sort of sexual depravity carried with human sacrifice as an effort to call forth Faule, the demon overlord to Zirest whom my character seeks. Caduceous in fact plays a role in this cult,.., obvious his intent to drug Xegis has been demonstrated. Perhaps Janine, your character is hired to protect a daughter marked for the ritual sacrifice.
"Bear": the character has his limits, as the moon wanes, so does the animalistic senses, until with the new moon he is essentially "human", but for his natural shapeshifting powers. Those attributes which give him an advantage,are by-products of the taint, gone at the new moon, only to return in slow increments with it's waxing.
;D I had been struggling with the end game, after all how does one dispose of a demon? But Adera's little gem gave me the hook,... I see that ending now very clearly with that gem. Getting the gem posed a bit of a dilemena, but I think I figured this out, ...
I have a couple principle characters ready to roll out,..Odeus Hammerhand, a Darwven smitty and his 4 gnomish companions (unnamed at the moment). I see the gnomes as tinkering creatures of chaotic good, full of right intentions, but of random disaster afoot if left to their own devices. (Adera's character encountering the gnomes could be highly interesting.) The pragmatic dwarf is their balance, a character who can set their brilliance to fulfillment.
the other a female Elven herbalist,... to follow shortly... anyway it's food for thought in consideration of your stories.
I can see this as a large city, where the prospects of contact may be fleeting,..or as Janine states potentially entwining.
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Besides the internal struggle Umbra is going through and which are perilous to his true purpose, other forces are working in this political gumbo as well. In a next post few characters will be introduced. The caretaker f the monastery, in charge of the place as the highest representative of the Brotherhood with his assistant. Their worries about the faith of the Ranger in this delightful city growing. A rumour about the Ranger's presence might be brought to the city as the characters might be joined by a fifth..
Besides that, although never discussed, the influence of the Brotherhood on the political arena is public secret. Everyone knows, noone talks about it. With the caretaker and his assistant, the governors of the city will be introduced as well. Tjose characters prettydefined, the Brothethood not yet as clear to me..:
Signis of the house Mercator, Prefect of Libidinis.A proud man, coming from old riches. Confident in his command, yet weak for his preference of male servants. Him and his wife not sharing bedrooms, a few nights per week the Prefect sends for a boy.
Lydia of the house Mercator, born Clericus, Prefect´s wife. Mentally not blessed with very high capabilities. She’s pretty dumb, but with her beauty and her seductional skills, she is worth a lot to the Prefect. As they don’t share an intimate relation, she is free to bed with anyone to her likings. Discretion a must and guarded heavily since she does not want to lose her status, derived from her husband. Nor can she go without his large chest of gold.
Comes of the house Mercator, only son of the Prefect, designated heir of the command of the city. Spoiled, cruel and an insatiable lust for twin sisters, servants at the residence. As they submit to his position as son of the Prefect, they are bound to his will to do his every bidding. His room holding a secret chamber where he lives out his depraved fantasies. His only weakness as he is under constant guard, the captain his friend and beneficial to his favors when he lends out the girls he owns.
Soon the Ranger will need to gather information about the son, he will meet his supplier. Meanwhile the festival is getting closer to opening.. Will that happen at the solstice? In my last post, the solstice will be in 4 days.. Will that date compromise your story Bear? Maybe we should end the days, by closing them, keeping a kind of countdown?
As for entertwining threads, I see a high possibility that Umbra will lose his faith momentarily, diving into the sensuality of the city. The central square a lure to all visitors of Libidinis, looking for entertainment. Be it a sexual encounter, watching a good match of Ludus Vitae or the skills of a trained swordsman/woman..
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On marriage, would Libidnis have any problems with adultery? I ask because as I'm seeing the nation marriage would still exist, but having other lovers would be seen almost as a matter of course, BUT that sort of thing could range from people assume it's happening, but never talked about, to open secrets, to just plain open.
I could start weaving into your story right now Tight as I see the women I'm in the baths with as members of a sort of women's social society... which this being Libidinis of course includes a great deal of girl on girl action. ;D I also see it as an inroad to the various strata of the city.
As far as the other ideas... I do see that sort of sexual enslavement you described as an abomination in Libidinis. Sexual servitude would be one thing, and a mutually agreed on situation, but what you seemed to describe was anything but consensual.
By the same token while I would see kids as taught that the body and sexuality are not BAD I see turning kids into sex objects as you describe the prefect doing would also be called an abomination.
Which of course means I wouldn't be hired to guard the guy as I'd pick up on that soon enough and probably kill him before you got over the wall. ;)
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Comes of Mercator is definitly an abomination in Libidinis. His father knows about his secret and his twisted mind, but since it is his only son, he forgives him every flaw. This behavious is yet unknown to Umbra, though he will find the room, empty when he goes out on his scout.
Suspecting what goes on in that secret chamber, Umbra might get enraged. Knowing know the sweetness of making love.
I could also see a coalition between Janine and Umbra possible if Janine finds out about the secret of Comes. It might be interesting to see how they both go after him. Either in an outspoken coalition or a situation where both go after him, without knowing about the other. An accidental meeting, a shared goal might create a dangerous team Comes has to be very aware off...
In a city as liberal as Libidinis, I'd see it as an open behaviour. No shame or secrecy. Both men and women can have mutliple lovers besides their spouse. Each relationship deepening a different aspect of sex- and sensuality..
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Hmm I think that quite a few nobles and others marry just for political or economical reasons even in a city like Libidinis, the good thing on the other hand is the view on sex in Libidinis which will let them have sex however they like. :)
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hmm,...interesting, viewpoints. The threads of Tight and Janine give a very stratified viewpoint of the city, . I had to sit back and absorb the flow of the stories there, ponder the weave. I see this city distinctly human, a social stratification segregating the noble families and wealthy from the common folk. This suggests either a segregation of economic neighborhoods, or houses controlling distinct neighborhoods. In such case I am having a hard time to see a natural blending of the races. A sprinkling of the races thru the city no doubt, but I sense that natural order suggests a enclave of the other races
Being a port city, the advantages of being an economic hub are obvious, but tempered in some manner that all who follow trade routes would not necessarily be compelled to find such openness and attitudes a comfortable situation. One must also cater to your clients.
Sexual servitude might be acceptable practice if voluntary, but power, wealth and lust are natural corrupter's, the desire of possession could easily lend itself to involuntary servitude since not all personalities will lend themselves to attract a voluntary follower, those with enough wealth and influence no doubt resorting to other methods.
I agree Janine, the forced enslavement would be viewed with disapproving eyes, but man is a weak vessel. I would have do doubt it is prevalent.
Corruption of such attitudes makes a natural attraction for the demon Zirest,...who might see the the free and natural expression of sensuality with a different viewpoint. To manipulate and twist into forms of decadence of corrupted lust...a natural pool of attitude to press his own agenda. I see the demon as a natural shapeshifter, someone who could easily twist the weak minded, perhaps corrupting of your target Tight. Humans are weak willed....makes them distinctive from the other races.
In my viewpoint of the races. a perfect city of sensuality would have been elven in nature, stronger minds of unified direction. Humans strive to mimic the perfection of elves, but are more selfish in nature, that selfishness the corruption of any idea. That is the nature of humans . A dwarf city of sensuality?....The pragmatic attitudes don't quite fit. The gnomes,...too chaotic of mind to attain. They could conceive, though I see them as finding paths other than straight line solutions. No doubt the gadgetry of invention a heavy undertone of employment. Hobbits?... their nature just not inclined to seek exploration of such an idea.
@ Tight Timewise though,.. I see my story starting much earlier than yours,..I am 3 days out from the full moon,.. if 28 day cycles, probably at this point of my story, If you are four days from the full moon, I am working currently about 25 days earlier. My characters purpose more muddled as he tries to unwind the mystery.Let me think,...I'll post what ramifications his actions might hold on your story at that point.
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I guess Libidinis is mainly occupied by humans (in the fantasy books I read, they usually were the main group). Therefor I chose to introduce the twisted character of Comes. I believe every human society has deranged minds, especially when fuelled with money and power.
Though Signis is in heart a good man, his favoritism for young boys not something exclusive in the city, his son has twisted thoughts. They might have been enhanced by the presence of the demon. I'll leave that option open to you, Bear. For the Ranger it doesn't matter what kind of person Comes is, and it might be interesting to see if Umbra will run into the demon or has to deal with his influence on Comes. If the demon has no dealings with Comes, his childhood might have formed the breeding grounds on which his deranged mind has sprouted seeds. Umbra will find out his secret. The forced obedience of the girls will be looked at with disgust.
It's his biggest secret. except for the Captain of the guard, nobody knows about this. Not even his father knows about it. The chamber was constructed secretly. Comes is a spoiled young man, his mind corrupted with the power and money his father has (in principle). He is very intelligent, found out early he could do almost anything and get away with it. Uses his intelligence now to weave a political net around his father, gaining the attention of the Brotherhood while weaving.. It will be his downfall as he threatens the peace that has benefitted the Brotherhood so much. At least, as long as the Ranger sticks to his quest...
In a way, this offers an opportunity for all 4 stories to mix together. As the gem Adera left behind, might hold the key for Silvermane.. To be truely honest, I believe this would be worth published as a book if there was a market for eroticism in a fantasy world.. all stories coming together in a way...
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I have to object to Signis being able to bed young boys without anyone acting, BUT I am seeing the word boys as children. Young MEN are one thing, but honestly working pedophilia in just takes some of the fun out of it.
For the city of Libidinis... open sexuality does not breed abuse but curbs it, and that's something that I see coming out. I mean if this Comes is always retreating to his private room no one knows about rather then having consenting adult relationships... people will notice.
By the same token if sexuality is an open matter kids aren't going to be afraid to tell, and if this guy has a taste for male children people are going to know, and I just can't see it as people being content to cluck their tongues disapprovingly.
Edited to add. The kids is the big thing to me. Having people overlook the suffering of adults is... frighteningly workable, but children fire off primal instincts for too many in my opinion, and again personally VERY uncomfortable with that idea no matter the sad level of historical support.
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Janine,
never intended to introduce paedophilia into the story. I should have expressed myself more clearly. Ofcourse I mean young men..
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Thinking how to jump in , sorry been so busy , might do small part on the side ! xxx sunny
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Sorry, was hoping it was a misscommunication. :)
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Hmm I wonder if I should get caught?
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I would think that would be up to me really. You think a warrior doesn't keep an eye on their weapon? I have something to add, but I haven't had the time. Feel free to continue with your story until I do.
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Okay, I was kinda hesitant about that... seemed a bit unfair to run off too far before you got a chance to at least "not find out about it". :P
I'm also thinking about the possibilities of getting caught by the demon or his worshippers.
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Phew, part 5 posted. Background on the Prefect and his son. I hope the Prefect's preference has been made more delicate, loving.. I did adapt the story to keep the thread pleasant :)
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Btw, I hope everyone is fine with the little twist I put on why nobles visit the baths? Well why they visit them mostly, there are of course those that do it for socializing. :)
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:) I am fine with it. I incorporated it in my story. The Prefect's wife goes on a regular bases...
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Hmm was the Prefects wife allowed to have a steady lover? I'd guess that's something the Prefect didn't want her to have in their agreement.
What I'm thinking about is if she usually only had one lover at a time someone power hungry could very well try to get at her. The Prefect would probably be fine with it if its just a younger and slightly dumb man but if it was an older, sharp eyed and already influential man I think he would feel a little threatened.
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Well now that the flooding has receded around here, :(
...hope to be able to focus back on writing the story. :)
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@Tight sorry ! hav`nt been able to jump you , ........ opps.......... I mean into the story ! Remember you put me on achat arrest ! :P :P :P ;)
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@Bear: I've been a little busy but I'm planning on writing a continuation in a while.
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@ Sunny Your achat arrest is done as soon as your paperwork is finished... :P
On the other hand, what am I going to do if you post anyway... ;)
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@ Adera Lydia, the prefects wife, doesnt have a single lover. She goes to the baths because she is a sexual creature and the Prefect knows this. He allows her to go to the baths (as many noble ladies do, understood from the story of the pixie ;)), though watches the frequency of the visits.
You are right though, a regular or even exclusive lover could complomise the contract Signis and Lydia have. Signis has always been aware of this and has ended previous relationships his wife had...
The rol of Lydia in the story will not be very significant,as she is oblivious to the plots woven around her family..
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Hey folks, while I've been wanting to post more no real big ideas have formed... probably part of the problem with not coming in with a big plot like Tight and Bear. Anyway though I did my last post to sort of put myself in limbo because I won't be anywhere near a computer for the rest of the weekend, but will hopefully have something good when I get back.
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mm,..just been working on figuring how to cope with the time line gaps between my story and that of yours...but the reality is accepting it,..just introduce characters of the town,.. since my story centers more in what I perceive as the foreign race enclave of the city...I decided to toss some of my concerns out for the moment, dip into that fantasy realm which I think we intended.
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Assuming our fantasy world is sphere-shaped, as it has a rising sun and moon, where is the city of Libidinis located? Northern hemisphere, or southern? Or is it near the equator? I'm asking for a minor detail in my story, wanting to know in which sky the moon rises and where it sets. Does anyone have any astrological knowledge? :) Also it will have it's influence on warmth and humidity in the city..
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POUT > :(
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@ Sunny Why the pout? (and *kiss*, for that happens when you pout around me..)
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Feeling inspired today.. Posts getting longer and longer.. Guess I find it difficult to keep the story smaller... Well, introduced another magical creature. A Faun this time, though a very naughty one... Hope you'll like it..
edited to add: all girls of legal age... ;)
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They tended to be rather naughty.... Satyr or faun... the sileni (the ancient of the satyr's /fauns) would have been drawn instinctively to the town and its openness, especially for such festivities. The Sileni were noted story tellers and performers,....
As to the celestial anything works as long as you post your decision here. I just presumed normal rise in the east and setting in the south of the sun.... presuming a warm environment...
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I was thinking along the same lines. A warmer environment, where people, especially women, are used to dressing frivolously ;)
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That sounds like a cue ;D
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mmm well your posting through the winter suggested frivolous attire was not requiring warm weather sunny.
As to the town , presuming too an extensive labyrinth of catacombs beneath...
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Tombes, secret passges and corridors, underground libraries with ancient secrets on parchment, hidden and almost forgotten.. treasures waiting to be found.. dungeons and jails, for the unfortunate.. Good idea bear!
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Well bogged down for a few days on RL issues but am still working on the story when the rare quiet times arise,. ..so don't expect anything for a few days...
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I have the plan to continue, but inspiration works on it's own schedule.
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Will continue posting a few more installments if the interest is there...What I have will be severely edited with an eye towards the juicier components...let me know otherwise I'll let the thread line die out...
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Actually, I've been thinking about getting back into this thread too. So please continue.
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I have written quite some material for this thread which has been edited and reread, edited again. Quite proud of the result. Dying to post, but felt compelled to wait for others to rekindle the story.. please, do continue :D
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I haven't written any more but I have a few ideas. :)
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Okay, I am actively wanting to reignite this story... is anyone else interested? Do we want to start weaving tales together? I see myself doing it either way, but if others are interested I'd love to start incorporating our storylines.
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Simple start Janine, I'm sure some of us (me too) will join.
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I must admit Lover I was hoping you'd join in.
Okay, I am right now getting myself back up to speed on the story. If I haven't heard from anyone by the time I am done I will just resume my tale. Otherwise we can figure out here how we will start blending them.
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Okay, I re-read my stuff to get myself familiar with my story, and I'm up to the second page of everyone elses and I've got an idea that could weave everyone already in together (and give any new people easy ways to enter).
Umbra's target is a member of Zeist's cult. A cult that has thoroughly infiltrated Libidinis.
My noticing of an over abundance of guardsmen, and the Brotherhood's notice of political unrest is the first signs of a much deeper, darker threat. The Cult of Zeist has been working to make the city a powder keg that at the height of the festival they plan to ignite, between the deliberate start of a riot, poisoning of wines and wells, and cultists just seeking to kill any who survive those first two they plan to make the entire city an offering to their dark patron.
The other lycan in the city ARE members (instruments if unthinking) of Zeists cult. I am thinking that I will notice that the attacks are forming a pattern and I will be able to predict, and prevent the next attack, but Tallon will have also scented his way there.
There will be a brief moment of confusion, but I can tell a thoughtful foe versus a slathering beast, and as a veteran I am used to making quick alliances on the battlefield.
We will team up and taken down the lycan. Afterward I will explain I saw a pattern forming, and when I show it Bear you will recognize it forms the symbol of Zeist.
We'll then go from there. With Tight being drawn in with his target part of a MUCH larger conspiracy (the Brotherhood saw a piece of a much larger puzzle) and Adera being naturally pulled in if for no other reason then I see her easily wondering what all the racket is about (she could even hear the battle when we take down the lycan).
Others could join in easily wherever they feel they would fit.
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The scholar Xegis is the one who holds the key to events. It was always my intention that Talon be forced into facing larger events then pure revenge, which has held his motivation and drive for many years.
I like the idea of the cultist attempt to undermine the city, though I saw Zierst as a pawn himself for his overload Faule, a higher power which sought to return to the corporal plane and exert his dominance.
Interesting thoughts though Janine,...I'll mull the idea over tonight and respond in the morning.
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Thanks Janine :) For the next time just ask me ;) You know I like talking to you, it's always a pleasure for me!
I have to dive in into the story and to the background then I jump in.
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Lover, you're very welcome to join in as is anyone else. :)
I can see quite a few possibilities for my character, I can continue kinda like how I've had, though I can also see how various people and/or groups might have taken an interest in the rare and rich magical creature. It could be groups like a thieves guild, exotic slave traders, power hungry magicians, servants of evil or something.
Things could easily turn quite dark and twisted though I'm not sure if I like that, if I'm caught I much rather it be a charming and cleaver person albeit the dark motives rather than a sickly perverse and horrible tyrant. Maybe my character will have to see some grotesque and evil horrors, but not experience them first hand.
Anyway, I don't want to end up in a classic situation where I'm too helpless and in need of rescue so I have to think some on where I want to take my story.
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:) I am very happy that there is an interest to continue that tale. I am in ofcourse.
I had been working on my own tale, continuing the tale f the Ranger on it's own and I have quite some material. Continuing with this thread will ask for adaptation of my own story. Something I will do with pleasure.
It's interesting Janine, that you suggest a larger underlaying conspiracy as the basis for the things happening in town. My story had gone the same direction, though the city had become the objective of the neighbouring Queen who desires to own the port of the City, as her own lands are not connected to the open water at all.
Though in content the story continues in a different direction, the idea is the same. I will be more as happy to join in again :)
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@Bear Could that be how his lord will manifest himself?
@Adera I'm not sure hon. I basically thought maybe you might see things others don't because you don't have those same blinders of what to expect.
@Tight I thought it might be a nice way to blend your story and his, supernatural forces causing political unrest for their own gains.
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Hmm after thinking some on it I realized that I thought of my character as too much of a "human", she isn't and therefore she wont understand or even be affected by things humans or mortals find evil. She can of course be robbed or tricked but it's not certain it will dawn on her or that she'll even care much about it.
@Adera I'm not sure hon. I basically thought maybe you might see things others don't because you don't have those same blinders of what to expect.
Oh, I will notice things others wont, I will for instance see the true nature of lycans but since everyone seems to be fine with it I'll just think it as the norm of this new and exciting place.
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mmmmmhh......i give a quick look here and there on this long tread. creating an entire city (and a country around it) whit a background to make your character move on it isn't so much easy, specially when a story is gonne be write by several peoples. so, i'll gonna read the entire tread carefully and then your, mmmh, 10 hands story cause you have make me really curious.
i'm a big fun of fantasy and sci-fy in general, plus i like work on modell kit (bad point i have soooo much wip suspended!) and when i work on something of my project, i allways try to image a world when my characters can move and have theyr own story. in the past years i had made several sketch of some chars: some of them was inspired by manga i read, others just come up like a sparkle in the dark. mmmmmmm, all this make me wanna try to do something more..........let's see, let's see!
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oh....i forget: the best thing i like of this tale is cause it's write from different peoples, so anyone of you make move this world and your own character step by step. the hard point is how to coordinate your idea, so this tread is essential to creat a good path to follow and avoid the risk of overlapping events or places, which is quite easy if more then one people is writing the story.
i hope i can give you soon my impression on your work, my friends!
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Janine my first suggestion to you (several months ago) about the abduction of the daughters of high profile members of the community might offer a common weave here. Out of my curiosity are you looking at the lycan abilities akin the line of attributes the underworld series with manifestation at will, (my own development of the thought of the taint was that it was more diseased... following traditional lines of monthly manifestation... though I had tickled myself with the thought downstream of "what if" in future stories should he encounter a pack that could transform at will)
I definitely see the issue Tight's character would face, a royal heir twisted with his desire of power to corrupt the natural order of sexual freedom the city now demonstrates. It would be a character easily drawn to the promises of the the cult of Zierst... even those followers may not know of his final end plan.
As to the female lycan bounty hunter, I definitely saw her as an alpha she wolf... a manipulator, yes it might seem she is used, but her compulsion and animal lust is a vehicle for manipulation of the men around her. Someone, who if in a wealthy community would have no qualms about creating a problem to solve, and morally bankrupt about not caring who gets hurt. So the twist of her presence for a higher purpose...
pondering that suggestion. (I am still trying to weave that thought under my original conception of the "taint")
(writing on the fly right now as the mind churns under its caffeine rush...the concept of an organized lycan community, the ability to change at will would take magic,... power... an ordered evil attitude what jumps to mind as a suggestion is a community of Dark elves... they would have the capacity of magic to control manifest at will... the mental development that might provide actual control in the form) Honestly I don't see humans as having such abilities in the mainstream of thought... they are just too damn weak willed... remember Talon is half elf,... magic imbued from his lover to handle his disease...( rambling in thought I am.))
@Adera I totally see your character as chaotic neutral, oblivious to the motivations of the conflict between good ad evil. That is what makes your character so charming., and fun to read. Your clarity of vision to all supernatural, might best be served by tripping across characters through the story and questioning them about the strange behavior,...in a final confrontation though, to be true to form, you might be as upset that the ugly dog people are slaughtered as to the issue of humans being killed.
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I'm fairly impartial about the lycans. Since I haven't set my swordswoman's time it could be right near the full moon, or it could be the at will transformation attack.
The key points I was going for were.
-I figure out there is an attack pattern, and use that pattern to anticipate the next attack.
-There I recognize Talon as the rational of the two (kind of like how you described that earlier lycan battle).
-We form a battlefield alliance against the predatory one.
-In the aftermath I reveal the pattern and you recognize it as the demonic symbol (Zeist, or your sage could recognize it as his boss).
I didn't want to weave it much farther then that, but I thought giving an over arching goal of saving the city could help pull storylines together.
@Hentai Have you read the Dragonlance chronicles? It started as a D&D campaign. So all those characters were shaped by the individuals playing them. Here it's quite similar, but rather then needing a DM we just respect each others boundries and hash things out here in the OOC thread before bringing them in story.
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I have an idea for my character:
A traveler who is able to see the future, but only few days. Also I am able to feel emotions, but not able to read minds in detail. Something inside of me brought me into this city though I don't know exactly why. So I'm searching the reason - which is my destiny, what is my task here?
Looking into the future costs lots of mental energy - so I can't do this every time and have to be careful using it.
I'm always having an inner fight - am I allowed to tell other people what I've seen? Am I allowed to use these information for my own advantage or to help other?
The other quest for me: The old story between intuition and mind. Though I have a very strong intuition (which all of my people have) I also wanna get knowledge from thinking.
I should be a wise man because of my properties. But in my thinking it's all just living without fun. I wanna have fun, wanna love, wanna laugh.
These properties together made me bit sarcastic. Perhaps I'm here to find my inner peace? Or I am here to loose my intuition and mental abilities...
Hopefully I find out...
Any other ideas for my character?
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Lover for depth,.. perhaps as a traveling fortune teller,.. who uses the charade of the tarot cards to cover his ability? Interesting idea...
Perhaps reading one of the disciple(s)... seeing the horrific pattern emerging...
The motivation to lose your connection in carnal pleasure... always undermined by unintentional readings... that makes a interesting story. Creates fear... caution... a dreading sense in intimacy... (just thinking aloud)
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@Adera I totally see your character as chaotic neutral, oblivious to the motivations of the conflict between good ad evil. That is what makes your character so charming., and fun to read. Your clarity of vision to all supernatural, might best be served by tripping across characters through the story and questioning them about the strange behavior,...in a final confrontation though, to be true to form, you might be as upset that the ugly dog people are slaughtered as to the issue of humans being killed.
Ehehe, ugly dog people :D, I hope my character wont upset them too much. :P
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@Hentai Have you read the Dragonlance chronicles? It started as a D&D campaign. So all those characters were shaped by the individuals playing them. Here it's quite similar, but rather then needing a DM we just respect each others boundries and hash things out here in the OOC thread before bringing them in story.
my bad, no. i know D&D only by name, never read something about it.
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i don't had read the story you wrote at the moment, but (damn all you! ;D) this make me wanna try something my self. so i start work on it tonight and hope to end the first part soon. i'll make you know how it goes!
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@Hentai When you are ready to jump in jump in. Until it involves other characters (posters on the forum) it's entirely yours, but that only makes sense really. That was what we all agreed on early on, this is a huge collaborative effort that is drawing closer, but will always be collaborative rather then any one person taking over the tale.
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Well, Janine, really thank you. but before to jump in, i wanna try something my self for the first time and have your impression. then, when the background of this tale is clear to me, i can try to jump in!
well, for the moment, i'll make you know how the title i'll gonna use: " A sisters' tale"! eh eh eh! ::)
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@Lover I see a few similarities between our characters and I think it would be nice if they met somewhere in the story. Like your character, mine is unconsciously looking for fun, is doubting his reasons to continue his service for the brotherhood without really believing in their doctrine anymore. After he tasted the first delights of love making (not releasing pressure as a biological and physical necessity), he is doubting his voww of abstinence. I see your character as some sort of hermit. Having all the wisdom, people coming to him to find advice and guicdance, while he himself disconnects from life, though he might want something different. Maybe meeting the right girl would help him find the path back to true living? Just thinking outloud as well :)
@ Hentai I think it is wonderful that you want to jump in. Indeed it is a callenge to invent a city and surroundings lands with a group of writers, but we are fortunate enough to have people like Janine and Bear that have laid down wonderful storylines and backgrounds for this combined effort. In my believes,l the more people entering, the more alive the story will become.
As Umbra is not up to speed with the reasons for his mission, he might be either urged to continue at all costs if he finds out, or drop the mission, leave the brotherhood and become an outcast. But I think that will have to be seen as the story progresses. The internal fight his is fighting, is about his wish for love and attention, as he was deprived of that when he was brought up in the monastery..
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Bear, could the Lycans transformation be done with the help of magic items or through the help of a god? I mean that it could give them the ability to transform at other times than ones a month.
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if i can give you a little hint: adera, u can mix the two things creating a fragment of an artifact the Goddess of Moon had left to the first Lycan. a fragment that can be use only by high-ranking Lycan
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That would make an interesting twist Adera,..., one could weave a dark story here on a sexual masochistic blood sacrifice for each disciple wiling to accept the transformation,... it could be paired then with the kidnappings taking place in the city.
Good god,... this could be weaved into an elaborate tale.
Janine taking a job in the protection of a high ranking house threatened by the cult,...perhaps to search for the daughter of a allied house,
Lover with his visions of the impending doom perhaps to one he becomes intimate with,
Tight discovering a much darker secret to his target,...
Talon unraveling the overt attempt to cloud Xegis' mind, the one that knows what is happening.
Adera, naively finding herself at the peak of events,... as she frolics thru the city. (I have not forgotten that stone Adera traded to the dwarf, I saw that as critical to the end game...)
Just thought of direction here with what is proposed... I am very curious Hentai' how you what you are thinking of.
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mmmmh, bear from your little recapitulation, the story can be really interessing and complicated, but if you are able to settle it in the right direction, it can be a wonderfull work.
I am very curious Hentai' how you what you are thinking of.
bear, are you talking about the story or about my suggestion!? if it's the second one, first of all i have to read how did you introduce the Lycan race and how they gonna be involved in the story.
but something i can tell you on how i imagine them: Lycan (werewolf!?) can be follower of the Moon Goddess and the first lycan in history can be the one who had ask to the goddess to give him the power to defeat his enemies and obtain revenge (trite, I know). after him, other worshipers of the Moon Goddess had pray to have the same power, to be one whit the goddess it self. at this point, the goddess had give to the first lycan an artifact, to lead his comerades in her name.
during the first big hunt to Lycan, the artifact get broken in, uhmmm, six pieces: five was rescued by the Lycan's commanders and 1 get lost (it can be the stone Adera traded to the dwarf!?). every pieces had the power to force the transformation of the lycan, even whitout the full moon, so wonder which power can have the entire manufact!
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Well I saw Adera's stone as simply magic imbued,.. after all it is from a different realm of existence,...
Very nice thoughts of deeper lore there Hentai'... I was curious though of your character should you decide to enter the story... and for any others...
Really for any you don't need to be a part of the story itself...feel free to share an erotic fantasy of an experience in the festival. The platform is for tales involving a more fantasy environment.
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@Bear: You made me thinking a lot about Tarot. Not sure if I do this but I see there has been a special way to use my ability. Thanks for your advice. You also made a good job when you summarized all characters.
@Tight: I'm sure we'll meet in the story :) I'm not so familiar with the whole background, perhaps we can have something like a common past. Many decades ago, we have been one folk which splitted into two?
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well, bear.....as i said i'm working on a story who involve two elves (see title in one of my preview post). at the moment, i'm creating a first part to introduce them and there is no erotic moment, just some drammatic one, but in the future, i'll gonna add it. and yes, thinking of it i can add it to this tale........but first i have to elaborate it a little! mmmmh, my mind is at work......and this can be reeeeeally a good thing!
anyway, i'll jump in only when i have the first chapter ready, cause i have a damn nice idea now!
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to give you a little idea on how the two sister will be, i add you here the old pic of them i had drawn some years ago.
(http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/121/a/e/elves_sisters_by_hentaiboy77-d4y6ulg.jpg)
honestly, is one of the jobs i like more, so I'm more than happy to see them in action
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Well, first chapter is now ready.......i have to read it again and then start to think on how i wanna use it: like a stand alone or linked it whit this tale.
First big difference whit your works is i write it in third person. but i don't think it's a big problem, not at all.
btw, i'm still thinking about how to jump in whit one of this two char (probably the one whit the spear axe), but to do it, i think i have to add a second chapter. hope i can do it in the week end, so next week ican add it in the forum.
btw, bear was curious about the char...well, here there is an anticipation:
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Phylia and Aily had grown in the ancient forest of Everious, a peaceful place for hundreds of years, where the elves have always lived in close contact with nature, protecting it from whoever has tried to destroy it. The giant tree of the forest has always give them a warm and comfortable place to live, providing them food and everything the elves needs. To show their gratitude, the elves had protect the ancient forest for generation, preventing anyone to cut trees indiscriminately, specially the humans, who use the wood to build their cities, ships and weapon for their war.
As a child, despite her slight figure, Phylia has been shown to have significant force, which she has always put it at the service of her village and once she become an adult, she was given command of the Green Warden, the defender of the forest. Many elves wanted the honor of being chosen by her as companions for life, be able to caress her strong and vigorous body, but at the same time able to express an innate grace and femininity, but Phylia has always refused their avances ........ the only thing that was really important for her was to protect her village and her little sister.
Aily, unlike her sister, has always been a shy and timid girl, but if necessary has always demonstrated excellent control over the elements, specially the one of fire, a very rare thing for elves born in the Everious forest. Her long silver hair caressed by the wind and her white skin, had dreaming all the elves of the village but no one has ever managed to win her heart, her soft and sensual lips…..
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Love it HB, wish I had your muse.
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well, thank you blue. even if i hade never write something, playing a good amount of RPG games on PC learn me a lot, specially if you follow the story till the end.
back to the OOC of this tale......probably i'm not going to use this char, as i had plan at the begin, but something different. a character that reflects the choice I made on achat, to stay on the subject. so, i'll wanna ask to all you which type of creature we can find in this continent.
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blue, if you think there is something wrong whit my engish, please make me know!
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this morning i can't reaaly concentrate on work.....being in office pissing me off to much. so, i think more on the char to use in this tale and come up whit two different solution:
1 - use the elf i'm working on: to do it i have just to change what i write from third to thirst person and go on whit the line i have in mind
2 - work on this new character: i was thinking about an half dragon girl (i have it in my sketch too!), but i have to work on how i wanna use it. no idea at the moment!
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Okay, revising what I had in my head a bit, and putting thought into the family that will hire me, and the job they will hire me for.
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I have to think up av few scenarios for my character... she's not really the sort than plans ahead.
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@lover not so much that he uses it to read,... but rather to mask his special abilities
and Janine just a thought on how to weave the stories,... as a mercenary it would seem natural to earn coin one way or the other,... the increase in guardsmen would suggest opportunity,,, while dallying in the cities offerings.
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I'm stuck on how to develop the story of the half dragon girl.....i know how to start it and how she can reach the city of Libidinis (or Libidnis!? i had see both the name here!) but dunno how to involve her in an erotic contest, cause she is a bit to particular: half human and half dragon, even in her look.
i'm pointing on a fighter type, but don't wanna make another mercenary......need heeeelp!
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You might be asking yourself the motivation for visiting the city at the festival.
Make your choices follow along that line,... you might not be there as a mercenary,... perhaps a member of the royal guard,... . or a troubadour in search of ideas from the human population, perhaps a priestess of a dragon religion coming give offerings to a fertility deity...this is your story in a culture where anything goes... so live a little!
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thank you for the hint, bear, but yesterday i had settle it a little.....
if i don't mind, there are fighting contest during the festival and i think i'll gonna join in one of them, after a little introduction. basically, in this first part, i'll gonna play on the contrast on her muscular appearance (and monstrous too) and her inexperience in love and sex, due to her condition (i'll gonna make her a shemale too!). The story begins with her being chased by the hunters for days....then, well, you gonna discover it
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Just as a note Hentai, we had talked about competitions in Libidinis, and one of the few points we agreed on is while they would exist, and would have injuries they would be more tests of skill then out and out blood sports.
So more martial arts tournaments, then say Mortal Kombat.
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I'll gonna remember it, Janine......thanks!
It's not in my mind to do a match in Mortal Combat style, don't like the idea.......plus, this is a festival and there must be children too, so there must be a rule who don't admit to injured badly or kill your opponent.
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I guess mercenaries can make quite a different amount of money from what jobs they decide to take. Caravan guard probably doesn't offer nearly as much as protecting a noble or participating in a dispute between rich cities.
I all probably depends on how reliable you are and what you have as references, reputation or if you can prove yourself in some way... not sure how much problems Janine is going to have with this though... that's up to her.
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mmmmmhhh......a mercs can learn more money if he have a good reputation, that's right. about works, well, it's a little unreal if you are thinking about a bodyguard. it will be good if you think it like someone have to protect your house, your estate.
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Actually Hentai that's exactly why we figured the contests would be the way they are. ;)
As far as pay, there are a great deal of factors. Yes, duties are a big part, skill level is another, reputation, but also simply supply and demand. Like any commodity lack of supply will increase it's price.
While I already noted there are plenty willing to swing a weapon for pay those who understand it takes skills beyond that possess a whole other skill set, and can demand a much higher pay rate.
Which also leaves good old fashioned negotiation.
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It also depends some on what they are looking for in a mercenary, many are probably not much better than ruffians and bandits while others might be more of a mercenary army where you'll have to hire quite a few of them at once... neither might fit some.
A family in need of protection might have some general guards that hangs around, but also specifically appointed guards for the family members. They might want a guard that they can feel comfortable with and maybe even have a friendly connection too, or they might look for undercover guards, like a guard posing as a hand maiden or a servant.
Many will of course want a female guard for their daughters or wife's because they assume that nothing sexual will happen then, but that is naive thinking if you read Janine's story. ;) :P
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In all places where turmoil is about to break loose, the city of Libidinis (how I thought the name should be when I created it) is raging with political tentions. The city always has, as mutiple houses are striving to get control over the City. The family of the Prefect, the current ruler over the city, have to use leverage and all sorts of political means if influence to keep the reigh within their family.
It speaks for itseld that competiting houses need some protection. I'd think that the wealthier a house is, the more they will spend on defense, guards and personal protection. Mercvenaries with the right skills, reputation and battle-experience will be well known through-out the lands, not just the city itself.
I am sure there are mercenaries that have the right talk but lack the skill, and are stlill able to find a good position with a wealthy house. And in a city like Libidinis sex and sexuality is far from being a Taboo, a mercenary is sure to get his or her relief. Even as a close, personal guard to the daughters of a house...
I might add a chapter, OOC, about the Brotherhood. With a slight adaption to the story that I already wrote, the Brotherhood can be the great adversary of the Zierst cult, knowing that Comes (the prefect's son) is directed by them, the brotherhood sends out Umbra to fight that danger.
Lover, I was thinking that maybe we came from the same village, grew up together then were seperated when I was selected to be raised in the monastery.. Maybe we can even be cousins...?
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In all places where turmoil is about to break loose, the city of Libidinis (how I thought the name should be when I created it) is raging with political tentions. The city always has, as mutiple houses are striving to get control over the City. The family of the Prefect, the current ruler over the city, have to use leverage and all sorts of political means if influence to keep the reigh within their family.
so, basically, the fighting contest can have to reason:
1 - each family can show to the others how stronger are their men and how powerfull the house itself is grown
2 - find new stronger warrior to hire in the family guardsmen, to serve them
thinking to it, i can get involved on the second line, but not interessed to take part in the game between the families, cause i'm not interessed in humans affair, after all
about the cult, what are you planning for!?
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Besides the chance for mercinaries to show their skills, the contests are also an initiation ceremony, where the young boys that turn to men, are challenged to show their manhood. The stands will be filled with eligible girls, that are looking for a future partner. The boys that exceed int he contest, are certain of warm arms and legs waiting to embrace them during the night, for them to spill the energy they have after the rush of winning.
I am curious of the cult as well. Maybe Bear and Janine can enlighten us with backgrounds. motives and perspective. The hiërarchy, goals and reason for being inside the city, trying to upset the fragile balance in political powers...
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from my point of view, there can be different reason.
Obtain the political power can be one, so they can have the full controll of the city it self, or there can be a secret beyond their movement: a ritual who involve all the city and the citizen like sacrifical victim (usually, a cult worship a God or a Goddess) or they can be searching for something (or someone!) hidden in the city linked with the beliefs of the cult.
more things come later
Besides the chance for mercinaries to show their skills, the contests are also an initiation ceremony, where the young boys that turn to men, are challenged to show their manhood. The stands will be filled with eligible girls, that are looking for a future partner. The boys that exceed int he contest, are certain of warm arms and legs waiting to embrace them during the night, for them to spill the energy they have after the rush of winning.
mmmmh, good point, but honestly, i don't like it so much (IMO): i know this is a common rule in several tribe, but there are most different form this and the one i see interessing is an hunt competition! ai i said it's my opinion.....
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Well a contest like that will be unfair to some and only a very few will win or go far enough to have proven something, it's not like the son of a baker will have much chance of winning against a noble son that have spent his time honing his skills with a sword. Still it's a festival and competitions like these are the usual entertainment and for many the important thing is to have fun.
Maybe I will help the nice but bored girls at a local bordello during the festival, business might be slow during such events. I'm thinking wagon wash, though getting a bath yourself isn't impossible... the no hands bath. ;)
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Adera, i just look at this event from two different point of view: the first one is about the contest we have it, a festival, so i agree whit the line Tight was saying......on the other side there is mine personal view. I don't wanna make you change what had you plan in this months working on the tale, not my intention
It also depends some on what they are looking for in a mercenary, many are probably not much better than ruffians and bandits while others might be more of a mercenary army where you'll have to hire quite a few of them at once... neither might fit some.
A family in need of protection might have some general guards that hangs around, but also specifically appointed guards for the family members. They might want a guard that they can feel comfortable with and maybe even have a friendly connection too, or they might look for undercover guards, like a guard posing as a hand maiden or a servant.
Many will of course want a female guard for their daughters or wife's because they assume that nothing sexual will happen then, but that is naive thinking if you read Janine's story. ;) :P
well, adera, honestly i don't feel safe whit a mercenary as a bodyguard.......most of them have no ethics and they just follow the high price they can learn. only few of them can have my full trust, pehaps 1 or 2! this remind me on the first part of Berserk when Grifis (in itlay) built his own army.
just to make you know.....i had copy all your work on Windows Word.....man, 43 pages to read!
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Ok HB, take a cup of coffee, relax and the start to read :)
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i think i'll gonna do it really soon.......but no cup of coffee......i'll think i'm gonna seat in front of my pc, open Media Player and make Sorayro Days start to rumble in my room! then, no one gonna stop me.....well, till i found some concept not so clear for my english knowledges! ::)
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As far as mercenaries, the skill range IS a major problem. The solution that developed right along with the mercenary profession is reputation.
Because skill levels are hard to truly measure outside of actual combat, as someone who could drill particularly well might crumble when there is a second weapon there and coming at them.
Reliability is also a key part of rep. The new guy is not going to be assigned to keep an eye on a VIP, besides skill level there is also the obvious trust issues.
Someone without a rep is going to be doing grunt work for peanuts (remember in my story Janine started out a handmaiden who joined because she had no where else to go). The better money and better jobs only come after time served, and a merc isn't going to risk that rep.
I did play with that concept a bit when I talked about her being employed to guard young women's virtue, but she was hired to keep them away from men and she would have died to do so... she just found a more pleasant alternative. ;)
Theoretically a merc COULD betray an employer, but only three circumstances would reasonably cause that.
-Betrayal from an employer. While it's one thing to not know everything about a situation you would be sending a hired solider into if you would deliberately hide information they NEED they would feel well within their rights to abandon the job (and come for you in most cases).
-Offered enough money to retire. The more honorable ones wouldn't take this one even then, but rep is a mercs bread and butter, and for those who COULD be paid to betray an employer (and destroy their rep) would want an amount that would ensure they won't have to worry about money ever again.
-Personal, this is sort of a catch all for say if one of Zierst's faithful infiltrated a merc company. It's unlikely, it rarely happens, but a sufficient personal motivation COULD lead a merc to betray an employer, but they WOULD be committing career suicide.
As far as the cult I was seeing them as out to kill an entire city. It could be a sacrifice to Zeirst, or it could be to bring Zeirst's master to manifestation, but I liked the idea of them ironically having a unity of purpose that the fractious city does not, even though that purpose is wholeheartedly evil.
Individuals might see themselves as able to acquire wealth or power in the aftermath, whether it be rewards for service or just looting afterwards, but I liked them being united so we would have to unite to battle them.
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Every point is really interessing and i like them, specially this one
Individuals might see themselves as able to acquire wealth or power in the aftermath, whether it be rewards for service or just looting afterwards, but I liked them being united so we would have to unite to battle them.
i'd like the idea of making all the stories collide in a main event (what ever it will be) and every character can have a role in it: Lover can reveal at last his vision (even if he don't wanna do it at the begin) and everyone can use their ability to solve the situation. thinking about my half dragon girl, she can use here sense (smell or hearing) to lead her comrades in a dungen or catacomb under the city......and i'm planning to use her higher sense before she reach Libidinis.
dunno how the story will be long, but every day i'm allways more curious about what gonna happend and if i can do a decent work.
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Finally I finished my first part. A slow entry into the story. Feedback here or per pm please.
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Finally I finished my first part. A slow entry into the story. Feedback here or per pm please.
i hate you.......now i have more to read! ;D
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I think you have a interesting character there Lover, I liked reading it.
What makes me wonder is what kind of future Lover is seeing, is he seeing the one and only future that is set in stone or is it the most probable future? I kinda like the probable future thing since a predetermined world seems kinda lame, though that doesn't make it easy to change events that will most likely happen.
As far as the cult I was seeing them as out to kill an entire city. It could be a sacrifice to Zeirst, or it could be to bring Zeirst's master to manifestation, but I liked the idea of them ironically having a unity of purpose that the fractious city does not, even though that purpose is wholeheartedly evil.
If the core group is to be evil they might as well be rotten to the very core. :P
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@HB: I was scared you are bored so I hurried to finish my work :D
@Adera: I asked myself the same question. As you I don't like a predetermined world. I think, one part of my mission is to help people and to change bad events, so I live in a probable future. But - who knows?
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damn you, lover......
anyway, like the suggestion of Adera on Lover vision! he can see only one of possible future, but that doesn't mean this is the one who gonna really happen
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Excellent Lover... loved the intro...
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@Lover I love the way how 'he who can see in the future' is so tormented with his destiny, looking for a way to escape without really knowing what his destiny is. I hope I am getting it right? Maybe his abilty to see the future should have a name, a myth-like creature that roams the earth and saves people for unescapable doom...
I think I will need to work on the fighting skills of Umbra, so far he has not raised a hand against anyone, which is his intention ofcourse. But, if there is to be a gathering of forces, to defend the city of certain obliteration, it would be good to know how he holdshimself in a fight. Maybe, during one of his nightly prowls. It doesn't seem impossible if he runs into one of the changers.
I do like the idea of all characters, is some way, team up to fight the threat against the city..
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Thanks to all for your feedback :)
@Tight I'm still searching a name for my character and you aks me to find a name for his ability ;) And yes you understood correct.
When I read your ideas I'm very interested for the next parts. It's exciting.
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I'm ecstatic to see you in our tale Lover.
It just leaves me all the more determined to get my next part put up.
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Wow Janine, do you know the pressure you're doing to me?
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I am not putting pressure, this is a the more the merrier kind of thing.
You are putting the pressure on yourself by showing how well you can do it. ;)
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Damn I knew I was wrong joining the story...
It was fun to write my first part, to develop my figure, to dream of the erotic part. Now I'll put more depth in it, more details.Think I need the translator very often next time :)
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that's good....if you enjoy it when you are writing, this mean you are doing it in the right way and i think you can do an amazing job. damn, i anvy you all!
about me, i'm still working to the first part of the story, to introduce my char and her first sexual experience. it takes me so long, but at the moment i'm wrinting it in italian, then i'll gonna translate it. hope i can do it soon and have your impression!
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Bump....
are we still going on?
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Bump....
are we still going on?
Sorry, I haven't written anything more yet. I kinda know what I could write next but I just haven't done it yet.
Bear and Tight probably have quite a lot ready already.
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I indeed have a lot ready, but have to review it before I can post. After the initial story more or less fell asleep, I took my part of the story and worked on it, more. I have about 35 pages of story ready.
But, I will have to work hard to adapt the existing story to fit with the so=tory on forum. As I have been busy with other matters, health concerns taking up a lot of mental and physical effort, the time to adapt the story has been lacking. I do expect to have (a lot of) free time soon, expecting a surgery.
The first thing I wanted to really do, is to write a background for the brotherhood, to give it a place and a history which explains the connection with the Zierst Cult. and for that I need to explore the cult itself, more intensively...
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Been caught up with the roof over the head, groceries in the house aspects of life, but still determined to get back in.
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yeah Janine reality has a nasty way of interfering...
I think of Zierst and his cult as meddlers in the affairs of the living. always attempting to find a power base of influence, Whether your brotherhood ses the broader picture of Faule's involvement I leave to you. Zierst himself represents a pawn in my mind when I look at my story. A very powerful pawn paving the way for something greater..
Talon wouldn't care... right now I am pondering what I see as his cycle of weakness, the new moon when the influence of the taint is low and he must survive on his wits and his other abilities.
And too I am trying to weave a "not so parallel" story, what posted here is a bit more lighthearted, and not wrapped in the dark moods my true story has centered on.
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Hey, no one has to apologize, there is (still ;)) a life outside.
I just asked, cause there has been a sudden death and wanted to bring it back to your minds. But thanks for your answers.
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I hope you mean the thread is slow... it always has been.
Or did something happen in RL?
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No, not in RL - last year has been bad enough.
I doon't know if slow is the right term for a thread that suddenly stopped. Or has "sudden death" yet another meaning in the states?
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better call it "volunteer hiatus" or sort of........man, my head......
btw, i still working on mine char but really slowly, so i dunno when i can add something. Plus, i'd like to ask Adera if she will read it before i post it, cause i'm a bit scary of hurting her feeling.
mmmmh, something run in my mind......somewhere i read about no post about animal......is it ok using fantasy creature like demon, naga or similar!? i have a big doubt about it!
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The animal thing is meant: No sex with animals
I (but that's my opinion) don't say anything against sex with fantasy creatures, as long as it fits to the background. Not just "I use something like an animal and fuck it".
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As I see it there is animal, and then there is creature. I mention my swordswoman having periodic trysts with a nymph.
I think a humanoid form ( dragon having the ability to assume one counts.) would be recommended, but even more then that consciousness to consent to the encounter.
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tasteful and supporting the story are my thoughts... so a creature with humanoid form seems fine with me...
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Well.... it is fantasy,.. and I would agree that with a viewpoint that a creature rational and consenting would not be an "animal".
Satyr's have already made their presences be known ,... a nymph... honestly not much fun if I can't play with my Neko here shortly...
@Lover... sudden death hangs with sense of finality...
The story thread better seem in deep sleepy state while its erotic dreams take hold.
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Many mythological creatures and such can't really be considered animals... though some are more than others but in general I don't see much of a problem as long as they're intelligent and fairly humanoid. Centaurs are creatures I wouldn't want to have sex with myself... horse cocks are way too big for me, but to have them in a story is all fine.
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i have the point, now.......thanks all!
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@ Bear
@Lover... sudden death hangs with sense of finality...
The story thread better seem in deep sleepy state while its erotic dreams take hold.
Thanks for your help. But that was what I was feeling - suddenly any talk has stopped. So I wanted to use some drastic words to show my feelings about it.
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I have gotten started on my next part, I'm planning on posting it this weekend.
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Wonderful Adera :)
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lol I had almost forgotten about it, but there is a scene in one of my posts where a Faun is playing for an audience of women, that are enticed, enchanted to give themselves to him and worship his member, while he directs their passion with playing a certain melody on his flute... So sex with magical creatures should not be a problem.
Adera, a centaur's cock... ouch! ::)
I hope to get some work done soon and post a new part... my mind had been redirected to designing clothes, yet I can't view them in achat anymore, so time to focus on work left laying in a corner...
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I can't see any problems with Fauns, they're very humanoid imo.
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Okay about to post, but I figured I would get the underlying direction I am headed put up here first.
The situation is going to be dramatically dire, but I'm going to weave some potential aid now.
The Cult at this point effectively has control of the city with all major figures either members or sufficiently controlled through bribes, blackmail, and the like or effectively irrelevant like the Prefect.
There is ONE who is directly related to the Prefect, but far enough removed from the direct line of succession that the Cult has decided h wasn't worth getting control of, but they also didn't want him getting in the way when they set their plan in motion so they undercut his security in order to make it easy to kill him once they start the riot.
He's not a bad guy, just a bit of a fool who grew up wealthy enough to have nothing to worry about, but distant enough to not have anything expected of him.
Genuinely good, I see us keeping him alive, and helping him mature so that when the smoke clears a recognizable leader can emerge.
(If any anime fans here have seen Ouran Host Club I will come right out and say I am drawing inspiration from Tamaki.)
But one member of his reduced security team is a former member of my merc unit who's expeirence actually has earned him the spot as captain of the almost laughable team, but when he hears guards talking about a fierce blond with a bastard sword he realizes the gods may have sent an answer to his prayers and he will track me down to basically beg me to help him out.
Which will leave me with a key piece to keeping the city from tearing itself apart when everything goes down.
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Janine, are you referring to the one Umbra has been ordered to kill? Comes?
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Well now Comes was the son as I understand it. Basically like a third cousin (or similar) sort of member of the family, but someone with the potential to rise up and lead (and be recognized as a leader) when the city needs a leader.
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That seems logical... Comes is working on his own plan to seize reign of the city. A plan most likely whispered in his ear by someone liased to the cult of Zierst. Thinking he is a mastemind while he is a puppet on a string, does fit his twisted, perverted mind... I don't see him as a member of the cult himself. His guarded life and his access to power, would make him look at the cult as interesting, but discarded as useless..
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Maybe split the difference and have the Cult have a semi-public facade like the old Hellfire Clubs in England. They don't know the Cult's full plans, but they give members thrills of the "forbidden". With the city easily lending itself to jaded sensibilities such a thing would probably be HUGE, as well as giving the Cult a means of control, allies, resources, and a pool of potential recruits for the Cult proper.
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With all this complexity, we need someone that can play the 'bad guy'... ;D
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A double face........mmmh, sounds interessing!
maybe the cult can use his public side to support a small and powerless family and then betray it, when the time for the main plan had come! or, more better, they can secretly fire up the rivality of all the families to weakned them....after all, the cult want the controll of the city, and maybe of the kingdom (or nation)
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I didn't get much writing done this weekend, had quite a lot of things to do.
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Actually I don't see the Cult as wanting control of the city. They want to destroy it, kill every last soul inside, loot it, and leave it.
For me that's a big part of our villains here. People scheming for money or power is common enough. I like the idea of the bad guys being beyond all that, and simply in it for the destruction. While there are some members who might see themselves as being able to gain money or power I see them as pawns, the core membership, the leadership, they will all be out to sacrifice a city to their dark lord.
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Seems like a good idea Janine, I wonder how devoted they are to the cause... if they're willing to die for it or rather run away that is.
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Adera, this depend on how fanatic they are.......new adept can be titubant on die for the cult, but old member can be ready to sacrifice themself
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Janine.. reread Xegis words to Tallon...
"collector"
You have the exact handle on my perception of Zierst and his methods when I considered him as an antagonist...
Faule though,.. I think would rather have an absolute corruption of the city into a level of sadistic pleasure over absolute destruction. A direct pipeline for humanity to channel his greed.
(corrected per hentai's sharp eye... what I get for typing without the reading glasses)
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cpllector!? err....it's an error or a new term!? ;D
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Bear, it happend to me many time too, even if i'm wearing my glasses (whitout them i can see nothing then some blur shapes!), cause sometimes i type too faster!
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So how would you see them Bear? I guess I just see the "Take control" a easily used storyline. Most every villain wants the wealth and power. I like the alien nature of being out for pure destruction.
Could Faule NEED the destruction to manifest itself?
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definitely Janine... Zierst would use his abilities in the manner you have stated like the Hellfire club... the end result the ceremony of fire a mass sacrifice a necessary ritual to complete Faule manifestation into this plane Twisting the festival to his own end to coincide with that sacrifice (destruction) makes perfect sense.
It's off story,... but I see the realm of demons as in a natural state of a power struggle. dedicated souls or followers would increase their strength in that cause. Destruction of the city would serve... but a rather ending action... I think the prospect of overtaking all control, and using it a central base to feed his power has a more chilling effect.
just my opinion...
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mmmhh, if i understand it in the right way.....so the cult is trying to open a portal, a connection whit another plane of existance to evoke Faule (what is him!? a demon or something similar!?). i can see why the cult had choose Libidinis to realize this plan: the noble's family are in disguise, the city had a name about,well, free sex and this are all things the cult can use to concentrate darkness power for the cerimony to open the gate. this line is a must in fantasy, i know, but it allways work.
about a sacrifice for the cerimony, well, i'm not so sure on how it can work. if i don't mind, someone had mension some kidnappings in the city....can someone refresh me about it!? anyway.....this event can be connected whit the ritual but not used to collect sacrificial victims, i see it like a plan to create in the city a sort of giant ritual shrine, imprinting on the stone a focal point of the real portal to summon Faule. How the cult can create this focal point!? consuming the body of the victim whit a dark spell and linking the soul in that place! (about this, Lover, you can sense this souls maybe, so the cult can try to kill you!).
@Bear: about the demons, you know, their goal is usually to gater chaos in the world and they usually use the dark side of human soul to open the way from their world to the one they wanna conquer. about Faule, dunno how did you imagine it, if he is a demon or another entity who like to play whit others being life just to satisfy his endless boredom, or if he is a devastator of worlds and he simply learn satisfaction looking at human pain, or...well, both of them!
Those are all my opinion, a point of view. you can consider them or maybe not.....it's your choise!
about my char, i can tell you this preview: as i said, originally i was thinking about an half dragon, but now i had change it a little. i had set her like an half demon and the name "dragon" come out in the second part of the story (i have some idea for it, but not write it), when, at the end, i probably reach Libidinis. maybe the cult can try to involve me in their plan!? well, let's see!
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A GREAT many fantasy tales have demons pull part of a world into theirs/create a permanent portal... basically establish a beachhead into the mortal realm.
Perhaps that's what this could be here. With Libidinis becoming a demonic stronghold in the aftermath. Or at least that being THEIR plan. ;)
As far as the ritual, while there would be specific rituals going on (probably at specific points in the city) I see it being capped with the main ceremony of the festival being turned into a blood bath with the cults murderous faithful convincing the city to explode in violence (feuding nobles going after each other, the thief's guild killing and taking, and basically any reason two people can find to kill each other being encouraged) with their members doing their best to personally kill any who survive the initial onslaught.
Every death effectively a sacrifice to the greater whole of their dark ritual.
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Well, i was thinking about a sort of giant summoner circle and to activate it, there is nothing better then a good and massive blood bath! mmmmhh, getting a little splatter!? ;D
Janine, had you ever seen Full Metal Alchemist!? something like that, where the entire nation become a sacrifice to open the door for God
@Bear: about the demons, you know, their goal is usually to gater chaos in the world and they usually use the dark side of human soul to open the way from their world to the one they wanna conquer. about Faule, dunno how did you imagine it, if he is a demon or another entity who like to play whit others being life just to satisfy his endless boredom, or if he is a devastator of worlds and he simply learn satisfaction looking at human pain, or...well, both of them!
I quote my self, miao! ;D
but there is a reason: this phrase remind me on the scene in Devilman manga, when Akira become Devilman for the first time. so, maybe all the cultists (when the ceremony start) become demons!? mah, just an idea who run in my mind suddenly.
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I have a little idea about the festival and how link the main event whit the ritual it self. when i have some more time (this evening, maybe!?) i'll gonna post it.
Two questions: we have a sort of "map" of Libidinis for some reference!? and, more important, did you think it will be usefull setting up a schedule of the festival event!?
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Never seen Full Metal, but good story is in good story. I just see ours as having a similar good idea.
The funny thing is that I am getting tons of great story ideas, but the sex is really becoming secondary.
I might post tonight, but I'm kinda tired. I will post soon as I feel I've got enough that I can post without worrying I'll step on any developing ideas.
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I see why sex is getting a little in second place.......we have ton of good idea to work on here and sex is just a decoration around them. i think when the story reach the climax (main event) it wil be impossible to add a sex scene. oh well.......not considering rape party started by demons! ;D
About Full Metal Alchemist......i'm talkig about the second series, Brotherhood! janine look here, episode from 58 to 61
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_Fullmetal_Alchemist:_Brotherhood_episodes
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ooook, part one is ready....need to translate it and send it to Adera for her opinion about the scene i had create. hope i can do it in the week end!
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Janine,
your last part sent chills up and down my spine...
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ooook, part one is ready....need to translate it and send it to Adera for her opinion about the scene i had create. hope i can do it in the week end!
Oh? That makes me curious about what the scene is.
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well, isn't something so strange (well, don't think so), but i wanna make your read it before i can post it........don't wanna hurts everyone feeling here, you are all nice friends for me!
Adera, i send it to you using the forum message when i have translate it and (i hope) i have it write in a decent english!
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I can correct some of the English for you if you like but I wont rephrase things since I want it to be your words.
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well, really thanks......I'd like to make you read it, more for the char i had worked on. this is my second experiment (the first one is still in progress more slowly then this!), so i had to work more on style and description by my self to find a rigth way to do it. but any hint is allways wellcome!
back to the city.........meanwhile i was writing my idea about the ritual i had post here, i had found this pic on DA
(http://th01.deviantart.net/fs10/PRE/i/2006/076/6/8/medieval_city_by_Geistig.jpg)
and this jump in my mind: "This is a perfect place to move a dark tale...this MUST be Libidinis!", so i wan to share it whit you, cause i really like this art piece!
mmmmh, maybe i can use it in my other story........
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HB, I'M not the guy with the best knowing it - but for me, your pic is great and really helpful. It is a bit like I imagined it for my story.
Thx
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No need to thanks...i only had share something hit my mind and make me think it can suit perfectly for a story like this. But this is just my opinion.
back to the ritual and to my idea of the summoner circle and the focal point.
i can presume the festival have a marshal, someone who introduce all the event of the festival. well, the main event is usually placed in the main plaza of a city and in this case, it will be the same. The cults had working hard to create the circle and the last thing they have to do, is to establish the core of it, but they can't do this in the same way of the other focal point, cause they need someone whit a strong magical power. sooooo (my personal tough), the marshal can be one of the elder member of the cult and he can sacrifice himself for complete the circle during the main event (the most fanatic in the cult, i think!). Then, the other cultyst (mixed whit the citizen and the visitors) can start the blood bath to activate it definitively and evoke Faule and his minions.
At the end, a darkness tower full of evil power gonna replace Libidinis!? What gonna happend in the world from now on!? we can found it out only when we end this tale! ;)
(http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs41/i/2009/018/2/a/dark_tower_by_godbo6.jpg)
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I'm glad you like it Tight. While it worked starting myself without any real pull into the body of the story now that's things are becoming more focused and pulling together Marcus was able to give my character the focus she needed.
And that part REALLY flowed.
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Janine, with those words I have just found the direction for Umbra... thank you...
For everyone, the last posts I have made in the story, or to read with a large grain of salt. I ntroduced a Queen in the story, who will disappear as quickly as she comes. That part I will give its own unique path to follow, a spin off of the previous story. I will get to writing soon...
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Janine, your story is great :) But now you have to go on writing, I'm interested in the continuation ;)
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Oh I will. It's just that I know I will need to be able to sit down and really devote some time to it... so I have it basically in my head, now I need it in my schedule.
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meanwhile i'm waiting an answer from Adera, i'm working on the story.
But at this point i think i had to read soon your work for trying to figure out a geography plane of the city and about the land where Libidinis is.
I have not clear in my mind if Libidinis is in a kingdom (but reading Thigh last post i think it is) and if this is the main city of it or not. Plus, we can suppose this kingdom is formed by different region and every one of them have their own administrator (ok, Libdinis is a bit chaotoic whit the nobles in disguise, but someone had to administrate public power!), so i had planned to start in another region over the sea and reach Libidinis on or two days before the festival begin.
About the city, the pic i had post can be a good reference, but not work for a city like this. so, thinking about it i had really in urge to read your full story and try to figured out how the city map is: harbor & dock, tavern, bath, library.......all!
About that pic, what i really think i'd like to use is the harbor entrance and an upper part of the city (hill on the right) where the nobles family can live, whit a strong ring of stone wall around to protect this area.
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I've been very busy with moving, but I'm planning to read you message soon HB.
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I know that.....take all the time you need. and, whatever you think of it (even you gonna say is trash) i really thanks you!
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Hentai,
the queen I introduce into the story, is the Queen from a country neighbouring the city. Libidinis as always been a city-state in my views. Built on the shores, allowing acces to sea and thus hardbor, creating a stronghold and fnancial basis for the city to thrive on it's own.
Neigbouring countries have been adter Libinis for it's strategical position, but haven't succeeded yet. The way the nobles work together, appointed a prefect, was in order to kep the city safe and sel-sufficient.
The Queen I am introducing, has always had her eyes on the city as her own lands have no access to the sea. The growing turmoil is known to her and she might see an opportunity to seize the city after the pinacle of fesatival, when the city is damaged and wounded, an easy prey for her..
I think it is described in the earliest posts of this thread. The city has an intricate design, as all streets seem to end on the central square where the majority of the festivities are being held. Other than that, the city has no real lay out yet. I think in some posts there are hints on what the city looks like, but it is still mostly a blank canvas..
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An idea of how i see the harbor: not simple wood pier, but something more complex
(http://i17.photobucket.com/albums/b76/DigitsDavid/CIMG1024.jpg)
add wherehouse, a tavern and some rudimental machine to carry stuff on big ship and it will complete.
From there, a main street can lead you to the central squeare and, going straight, you can rech the upper citadel of noble s family. this is just a basic idea.
p.s. that table is not my work
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mmmmhhh, thinking a little after dinner and i had make this little map of Libidinis.
(http://img807.imageshack.us/img807/6681/libidinis.jpg)
dunno if it's good or not......btw, this are the main place i have in mind. about the bath, i was thinking to put it in the low right side of the map, or maybe near the river.
about cardinal point, north is in the direction of the harbor, i think
ooops....i just notice i write "reaver" and not "river"....maaaan, kill me! :o
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The bath would likely be near a source of fresh water, or have some sort of magic provider/disposal.
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Magical provider for water seems very expensive to buy from a magician, imo the bath is either close to water or they are using an aqueduct.
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I agree whit Adera........an aqueduct, the river or an underground source will be good. How i said, this is just an idea on how i see the main place of the city. if you have more suggestion, i can upgrade it time by time, to have a complete idea of how it evolve.
oh...i forget: i set the barracks near the arena for two reasons:
- soldier can easly reach the arena if there are some problem whit the fighter
- this area is near the gate for the outside land, so the soldier can easly reach it and defend the entrance of the city.
mmmm, bear, i just have some doubt about this: "The library had been built on a hillside, and from the old sages quarters it gave an unobstructed panorama of the city and the western ocean that lay its foot". i had take it like the ocean is on the west side of the library, so i set nord to the harbor. am i right!?
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If we go on with all these details, it's just a question of time when they make a movie about it ;)
But I love it and it's helpful.
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Or maybe a TV series....... ;D
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Hentai I saw the see lying to the West of the city so if the map flipped it would be correct. Point of not.. the castle complex (fortress) generally lie where you have the library marked, that would have been done to utilize the sea as a protective barrier.
Tight that would be of traditional Roman architecture,...one would have the central public venues in the heart of the city Although a human cit I saw a foreigners quarter just off the docks...the merchants quarter radiating off from the docks. One would think the arena as a public venue wold be closer to the city center... (at least that makes natural sense to me.)
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@HB: Or both ;D
Bear, nice to see you back :)
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Hentai I saw the see lying to the West of the city so if the map flipped it would be correct. Point of not.. the castle complex (fortress) generally lie where you have the library marked, that would have been done to utilize the sea as a protective barrier.
i can easly exchange position between library and upper city (the first part builded when men start to leave here)
Tight that would be of traditional Roman architecture,...one would have the central public venues in the heart of the city Although a human cit I saw a foreigners quarter just off the docks...the merchants quarter radiating off from the docks. One would think the arena as a public venue wold be closer to the city center... (at least that makes natural sense to me.)
about the market, i agree....it will be near the harbor and, looking at the map, a good area is between the arena and dock. nothing better then have lot of peoples coming to see a contest for increase money movement!
and the arena....well, if we move the upper city on the library area, i can set it in the low right area of the map, but the barracks must be near the outside wall, maybe on the other side of the street.
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Just a question...
imo the library should be on a higher position, on a hill... on the map you built HB it seems so. Am I right?
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Yes, it is......this is what coming out reading this from a fragment of bear's story:
"The library had been built on a hillside, and from the old sages quarters it gave an unobstructed panorama of the city and the western ocean that lay its foot"
btw....i'd like to know what janine think of this map, cause basically, she is the one who probably know better the city plan.
just a thing: if i don't remember badly, there is a monastery near the library....am i right!?
Map version 2.0
Removed old version
i don't had settle the location of bath, cause i'm not so sure where to put it, but i had add the monastery near the library and move the barracks. what did you think!?
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Oh I've been deliberately keeping it open for us to develop, but I think the barracks might be better situated in the empty western part of the city, because it could be placed closer to the gate, as well as the river and harbor to better defend against invasion.
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yes....near the river can be a good idea. they can take forniture directly from a ship, if needed!
what about if i move the bath between the two hill!?
@HB: Or both ;D
Bear, nice to see you back :)
sure, Lover, why not!?
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Tight that would be of traditional Roman architecture,...one would have the central public venues in the heart of the city Although a human cit I saw a foreigners quarter just off the docks...the merchants quarter radiating off from the docks. One would think the arena as a public venue wold be closer to the city center... (at least that makes natural sense to me.)
only now i had read about your idea on the position of the arena. so, i think we can imagine it between the two hill and (IMO) the bath can be settled where i had put the arena.
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Ok, last two version of the map: which one did you prefer!?
Map version 2.1
Removed old version
Map version 2.2
Removed old version
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imo map 1... placing the arena between the two hills, offers the paupers of the cities to catch a glimpse as the collect on the slopes..
I think the house of the prefect (an important location i my part) should be located near the barracks. As controller of the city, he seat of reign should be close.. for quick transfer of messages if needed..
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I haven't thought much about the layout of the city, but I guess it's nice to have one even if I myself might not need it as much. :P
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I think the house of the prefect (an important location i my part) should be located near the barracks. As controller of the city, he seat of reign should be close.. for quick transfer of messages if needed..
i see....maybe between barracks and harbor. so, the prefect can easly send orthers and receive some important visitors who come to Libidinis using a ship.
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Map version 2.1.1
Removed old version
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I vote for map 1.
There is something missing left and right beside the main street, though I can't tell you what... it's more a feeling I have.
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Lover, this map can be upgraded when we need it, adding taverns (Tight,if you wan i can add the "The Anvil"), blacksmith and whatelse we need. here i had sign the main place, what we really need:
- i'll gonna join the contest, so i need the arena
- the house of the prefect is an important location in Tight's story
- Adera and, if i don't mind, Janine had take a visit at the bath
- etcetera....
In the empty area we can set house, small square and maybe a little park (or forest!) behind the arena and near the bath.
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What about a church or probably better a place for sacrificing?
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The church can be a part og the monastery (maybe). about a sacrificial shrine, dunno......but if you need it in your story, we can settle it!
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hmmm... well my own thoughts were those were happening within the catacombs under the city... my own thoughts were that the temples and religious structures were near the Library...
their position on the hill obvious in symbolism..
If any spot lies yet important to me... it is the bath...
I saw this as an access point into the underworld.,,, with the aqueducts feeding it and the drains,
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mmmhh...catacomb and underworld.....the nobles' residence and the monastery are on the top of two hill, an obvious and strategic position, aaaand, there can be a secret passage to link them! when the city had grown, this passage grown whit it, to link strategical point.
at the end, the bath can be an old safety exit form the old city......
my opinion, like allways
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Hentai,
I like your work on the map. And I have a few suggestions..
1. I'd like the tavern to be marked. I'd say north of the main street, at the bottom of the 'library hill'.
2, I think the Prefect's house shoud be further away from the harbor, and closer to the central Square. The central square is the beating heart of the city, it seems logical the seat of power is near it. Also, the harbor will have activities all through the night, not such a restful place and not the right neighbourhood either, with borothels, taverns and warehouses.
3. I also think there should be barracks at 2 sides of the city. One near the harbor, the other near the gates. Guards will be patrolling both walls that protect the city from threadscoming from the mainland, as well the entrance of the harbor, as it is the 2nd most likely place to attack.
4. The last point I wanted to suggest, in my tale I describe a secert corridor from the prefect's house to the city walls. Umbra almost gets caught there and only just knows to escape. It will play a big part in my story and it will opt another way of escaping.
I see the harbor as only weak point in the ocean side of the city's defense. The shores in the part of the land covered with rocks, high peaks and razor sharp coral banks. The reason why Libidinis became so strong and rich, is the only safe access to the sea for tens of miles..
Wondering if anyone has an opinion to offer on my thoughts?
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mmmh, let me think.....
1 - the tavern can be placed wherever you want, but we can presum there is no only one (even near the harbor), so there are no problem for me.
2 - we can imagine the Prefect house on the street segment after the turn of the road from the harbor to the main square, in front of the market area. Werehouse are all around the harbor and a brothels can be placed in the area of the bath.
3 - the second barracks near the gate can be good, but i think it more like a small one. the main barracks is the one near the harbor.
4 - About the harbor, tight look at wall near the see and the pic i had post before: imagin Libibdinis all surrounded by high shores and the harbor is on a depressed area.
about the passage for the wall, it's ok....the catacomb can be placed only around and under the two hills.
p.s. before i'll do any modify on the map, i'll wait for other suggestion.
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I'll wanna really thanks Adera for reading my work and waste her limited time for it! Thank you so much, dear friend!
But there is someone else i had to thanks....my dear Marla, for helping me to fix some part whit some good hint!
Now, all i have to do, is to work and end second part.....hope i can do it soon!
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Wow HB, very thrilling, it was a pleasure to read it, thumbs up!
Just for our american friends a two meters and more figure
he is talking about a lenght of 7 feet.
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Thanks, Lover
the real issue, for me, is to find the right way to translate in english what i had in my mind. hope i can stay on this line for next piece!
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Hentai,
very, very well done. I am looking forward to your story for the contest as well.. Very vivid, explosive... Hope to read more soon...
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You mean the summer contest!? awww, i totally forget.....i have a sort of idea, but....ok, there is time!
*taking a deep breath*
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HB, you are not alone in this, me too is searching for the right words, especially in a fantasy erotic story when I also have to get into the whole background of the whole thing.
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I know....for peoples like us, who are not using english like main language, isn't so much easy!
Ok, time for map upgrade!
Libidinis map version 2.1.2
(http://imageshack.us/a/img547/7020/pqij.jpg)
plus, a little work i did to take a look at the land around our city:
Outerland map version 1.0
(http://img100.imageshack.us/img100/1849/aroundlibidinis.jpg)
Thinking about the neighbor kingdom whitout ocean side, i imagine mountains all near the ocean and the sea (brown and grey parts of the map): those can be natural limits of the kingdom it self. The grey area in the left top side of the map is where i start my story. Ready for a sea travell!
p.s. i love doing this thinghs! ;D
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I hope I didn't mess with anyone's plans with my last little part?
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Adera, you are a really pest pixie......ih ih!
Ladies and gentlemen, i know it's not important (who cares!) but i wanna make you meet my little char! hope you like!
(http://th03.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2012/054/5/3/dragon_girl_1_by_hentaiboy77-d4qoxxb.jpg)
This is not the complete pic, cause i wanna rework it to make her more similar to my char.
Can't wait to end the second part of the story, but need time!
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Adera, you are a really pest pixie......ih ih!
Oh, me? I'm all innocence.
Nice picture btw. :)
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Not my work.....i had copy a pin-up from a manga (Dragon Quest - Dai) and modify it. But i'm planning to rework it in my style.
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ok I`ve been gone awhile (had some seriouse business to content with ) what summer contest ?
Hope to be back here more !
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sunny, we are ready to start it.....just take a look around here
http://www.funnyadultgamesplay.com/forum/index.php/topic,1433.0.html
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Long time from the last time we post here.......someone is working on new piece of the story!?
i have some idea to work on and ope i can do it soon, cause this tale is a nice project and i don't wan to see it die again! hope to see more soon!
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I'm not workin on another part at the moment... too much work and the contest took all my attention.
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I have an add... but did not want to take away from the focus on the contest...
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i can understand both of you.....just, well, i hope we can continue this story soon!
Bear, it's nice know you have more ready! great!
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I have had too many things on my hands to also think about this story. 'The mystery', the contest and designing have absorbed a lot of time. I do still have material that would need a rewrite. It's a matter of starting it up again. The contests (as I hope to be able to organise one every 4 months) will be continous, as I hope this story will be too.
I am very curious about your new part Bear, might be just what we need to get inspired again :)
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Can anybody join in ... obviously in fitting with the stories so far ... ?
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What about you Brandy?
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Maybe a mysterious figure with skills & magical powers / gifts too, coming for the summer festival games, maybe ... seeing other characters on the edge of their stories ... entwining and off shooting little stories that, that may inspire ... still thinking about it ... but wanted the blessing of the other authors first :)
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Maybe a mysterious figure with skills & magical powers / gifts too,
You talk about yourself?
Be sure you have the permission of all the other authors.
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It's why I asked :)
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You can join in if you ask me. :)
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anyone most definite... even if it's just a one shot entry of something related to the setting of the city...
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Brandy, you're welcome. As is anyone else that wants to contribute, within the frameset of the story.. :)
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Brandy, you are wellcome!
A stand alone whit Libidinis as background or entering in the full story we are working on is good......well, i'm not really at Libidinis at the moment, but hope to complete my new part soon and finally i can join!
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Thank you .. think that just leaves Lover & Janine then ... unless .. I missed anybody ... Let me know... I'll send my story to Tight when completed for approval , if thats ok.. .. and if I have unanimous approval to join of course. :)
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Brandy, i don't think you need a seal of approval......if you think this tale can give you the right hint for a good story just do it! I'm getting really curious about your work! ;)
For any doubt you have you can post here or read the preview page! and i think all the other authors can agree whit me on this!
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IMO... open to anyone... if you want to weave your story lines with others courtesy demands that you do discuss the matter with the other authors. As a whole,.. independent stories.. rather involving that specific location or not, I feel do not require permission. It is a place for erotic fantasy stories, for any and all who wish to jump in and share a tale.
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chiming in with Bear.. there are no restrictions for any one to share a story in this section.
For the erotic fantasy tale, the story should fit within the frame that has been set before. But within that frame, I see no blockages other than the usual ones (against tos, or breaking any laws or rules that are enforced by governments etc.)
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I think Bear and Tight had say all......i only can add: "keep on working on your idea, Bee!" ;)
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It's just about etiquette Fellas but ty for your support. Still would like Lover and Janine to confirm though before I post :) Ty
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Lover is still in shock over the loss to Italy... Janine is visiting infrequent... and I think,... and am quit certain she would not object... so please... although we apprciate the ettiquette... prep your story and just do it...
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Ok - I'm going to just ..... do it .... lol ( Nervous now lol )
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Well done, Brandy :)
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Very well written Brandy, an interesting character. :)
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Indeed this might prove interesting if we ever cross paths when I am not in human form...
Very good Brandy... see that didn't hurt at all.
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With surprise I noticed that nobody read my answers. Brandy, I was the first who asked what about you and also that I'm sure you have the permission of everyone. At least this an open forum and we are happy about every author.
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Aww, ty Lover.. guess it got lost in translation to me ... I thought you was advising to check with the other authors.. wasnt sure about your blessing bit :) ... Ty ... and first part now posted .
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Crap, really short time to write recently.....
Mmmmm, seems like you have done a good work, Bee! holy xxxx, i had to read the contest story, complete my new part here and read all the tale....and i don't have to forget about my pics! HEEEELP!
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Brandy... your story is well done. Hope to have time soon to write my next part. Also hope all the other authors get the time to work on it.
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K, too much to read so I'm just going to ask.
I CAN write my own lil short story and add it to erotic fantasy right?
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It's open to all... go for it!
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Sinnnn,
the one 'objection' I have with your fantasay is that it is put in a story which is set in a fantasy town/world (as in dungeons and dragons), with magical creatures and powers unknown to the real world.. IM-ing and messaging is a big leap ion the story. Would you mind if your story became a seperate thread instead of being added to the fantasy story?
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Tight,
Go for babe. I'm not gonna object, lol.
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:)
tnx Sinnnn
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Skimming, but yes, all are welcome in this thread.
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I resume this thread to make a little question to all of you, specially to Bear (the missing one) and janine, as the two who start this project....
whant ask you if it will be a problem if i continue my story as stand alone, outside the whole fantasy tale. Of course i'll gonna use my char (not yours) and the concept of the city i had show you and we have settled together.
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I know I have no plans to continue it, so I wouldn't feel any objection.
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A couple nudges from a vocal pair have requested I resurrect my fantasy tale...so for them, and others who might have enjoyed it...Talon returns...
To any others who might find an interest weaving a story into the mythical city of Leviticus please find your muse and add your own tale here.
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Welcome back in action, Bear! I'm glad you make Talon revive another time!
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YAYYYYYY
Talon is back, the bar is set. Congratulations Bear,
Awaiting more episodes in anticipation.
Maybe Janine, Adera and Lover may be tempted too. I do hope so.
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And what about you, Bee!?
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Thank you Bear and HB. I am reading you both and enjoying the resurrections.
I hope you all continue the stories here.
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Well its about time we got some stories out of you :)
hope there is a back log of unposted material
welcome back to writing
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Welcome back to the story bear, good you're pushing it :)
I will continue too, my character is still standing on the foot of the city - for 2.5 years now :D
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Now i understand what those spider nets against him are! :P
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To let everyone enjy this tale, i'd think to post here too the final version ot the city map......enjoy!
(http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2014/263/8/0/libidinis_by_hentaiboy77-d6wupqa.jpg)
http://hentaiboy77.deviantart.com/art/Libidinis-417977794
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Welcome back to the story bear, good you're pushing it :)
I will continue too, my character is still standing on the foot of the city - for 2.5 years now :D
May I suggest knocking at the gate and seeing if anyone is home?
Yes jayc there is a backlog, but a sudden revelation of the storyline mandates a full rewrite.
I am struggling with a scene ...which in my reread seems woefully inadequate for its pivotal part in this story.
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ooook, after had a talk with Lover, i agree with him about adding here too the part about my character that can make some of you interact with her.
at the moment, i added only the second part, slowly i add the others too.
p.s.: sorry for double posts
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Yayyyyy! wellcome back in action, Brandy! i'm happy to see you working of your line of the story!
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Thanks HB, Had a bit of relaxation time so thought I could do a bit of writing instead of reading.
@ Bear, if you need to brainstorm, you can PM me if you think it will help.
@ Jayc & Stone. Hugs to you both. Jayc, don't scare me like that again. I suppose this means , I have to make you tea now. Bloody Junior Mods lol.
Least I get to watch you eat rabbit food, while I chomp on the donuts ;D ;D
Good to see you back home. Hugs & Mwahhhhhhhh.
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Thanks Brandy I have been more over thinking the next scene and should probably just post it and let the story roll. I have been a bit busy taking care of some the quake damage from last week (Others homes not mine thankfully I was on the outskirts of that rolling shaker)
Sorry Jayc but I do think Brandy made a better spot of tea.... though I never understood her aversion of letting me have honey with it.
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Over thinking, men ? Narrr
Please post, we are all waiting. :-*
Hope all are getting the help and assistance in the quake effected area. Thoughts to all those effected and things get back to normal and a semblance of order soon.
It's the aroma of hot honey, it sets the gagging action into full drive. Not a pretty sight lol.
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I know what it mean to live in an area after a quake, there was one here in 1997 and for months there were small others. Wish the things are going to be settled soon in your area and everyone get the help they needed.
Now, back to the tale.............as you probably seen, i've posted the extra chapter about the Lycans in my chronicles and i'm planning to write more of them till i reach the event i'm planning and where they are involved begin. Anyway, i hope it may fit here too......
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Many thanks to Brandy for giving me some input and nudge of how to sew these passages I have been trying to hammer out over the past few weeks.
Hope you all enjoy it as the story plods forward.
The question now is should I plop them all in front of you or let them trinkle out day by day?
Decisions... decisions
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Glad to see some new episodes being posted. Glad to help.
I vote one a day. I need to get writing on my own story as well, will inspire to do so
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I'm happy to see you two active here, too bad Janine, Adera and Tight are away from forum and can do the same! Now we need just Lover and the team is complete!
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It would be lovely if you all returned.
However, I am enjoying all the episodes posted so far and am looking forward to the future posts. Please keep them coming. I am hooked.
Thank you to all three of you for continuing the stories.
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Just gotten to reading this topic and I can honestly say that I'm hooked.
Simply an amazing read and all the authors that have contributed and continue to contribute are evidently immensely talented.
I especially loved reading Brandy and Bear's recent contributions. The way Brandy describes her and Lamar's intimate moments is so precisely detailed and described, which made the whole scenario very exciting to read. And that one post where Brandy ends off by simply saying "Werewolves", I rushed to the next post because I was so enthralled in anticipating what was going to happen next.
Similarly, Bear is doing an excellent job with the detail and cliffhangers at the end of his posts. Can't wait to read the next post and see how things play out with Autumn, with the "beast" being free from shackles and all ;D
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Thanks amy,... good to know that not all the views just are peeps clearing the unread message thread.
I agree though, Brandy sets the standard, she is an amazing writer.
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While that is true, I personally think you shouldn't underestimate your own talent as a writer.
It's safe to say that you are one of the forum's original, creative, imaginative & detailed writers that has opened the door for the many others that have followed.
Your recent posts in the erotic tale topic have been a captivating read so far & I can't wait to read more, so please keep 'em coming! xx
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Me too Amy. I hope all the writers here consider entering our little contest.
Forum Home Page > Announcements > Forum News > Erotic Story Contest 8 - Cheating / Infidelity. OPEN FOR SUBMISSIONS TILL MON 30 NOV 2014.
http://www.funnyadultgamesplay.com/forum/index.php/topic,3352.0.html
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HB's is good too and part of this fantasy story.
Dragon's chronicles.
http://www.funnyadultgamesplay.com/forum/index.php/topic,3256.0.html
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Glad to see Bear posting here now more than before and thankds to Ami for the nice words about his work. And a big kiss to Brandy for remind to my Chronicles and for all the help she gave me in past (and she will give me in the future!)
I'm a bit stuck with writing at the moment, but hope i can go back to my story soon......veeeeery soon!
And last but don't least: to all the forum users, continue to support us with this tale, we need it! thanks you a lot!
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Perhaps its time to be not so predictable ::)
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My reaction after reading the newest post by Bear in the erotic tale topic:
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& can I just say... Wowza! What a great plot twist!
(http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-7ZzrIodRoUk/VAc5cqX-j7I/AAAAAAAACrY/_a8-P73Maxw/s1600/Shock%2Bgif.gif)
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All of the three writers are brilliant.
Please post more soon. Its so exciting.
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more coming... as I said I am writing a whole new version of the story just for achat... yeah its raw, and grammatically imperfect, but you'll get a story which I hope holds the interest. Hang tight this gets even more of a twisted tale...
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gosh, guys......Bear & Brandy, you really started to write a lot here and i'm proud of you two! Plus, i'm happy by the fact my Dragon chronicles had wake up again the interess for this tale!
Too bad i don't have the chance to work on my Dragoness recently but be sure i'll do it soon as possible! Meanwhile, i'm working on plans for the future of the story and i have more things settled, as it's clear from thwe world map i posted.....stay tuned here and in the Chronicles thread!
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lol.. well I did leave a cliff hanger... need to finish up a couple segments and I'll post soon
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Bear, Can you hurry up please ;D
HB, Brandy, Bear - I'm enjoying all the instalments. Please keep them coming.
If Janine, Adera , Lover & Tightfit are still out there, I'd really like your stories to continue as well.
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Thanks for the support, Stone, as one of the active member in this thread i really enjoy your cheers!as you probably has noticed, i have added a new line in my Chronicle, wich is a bit further then what i posted it, but soon i hope i can work on this story more and more!
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As you can see, in the tale I had reach the point where I add the Lycans interlude in my Chronicles..
Now.....for the future of my story, the Lycans are important, so I'd like to add it in the tale too, but first I'd like to have your impression!
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Helloooooo!? Still waiting! thanks!
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The werewolves ( no control of their taint ) and lycans (more control of the taint ) could be the top dogs, working during the night to take over the city, slowly but surely, to topple the kingdom with a view to conquering neighbouring lands. To ensure a good supply of food and new victims to join their realm.
Of course, the vampires, simmering in the background & yet to arrive may object to this plan, as well as the current houses of the city, if they even realise the dangers that lurk when darkness falls.
The plot thickens ....
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My idea about the Lycans is a bit more complex than this, they are used by a certain entity. If you want to know more, I can show it to you in private!
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was pondering at a short description about the city of Libidinis and its activities, so this is what I was planning:
Here, anyone can have an opportunity to change his life, it doesn’t matter the race or the gender, it’s all about having a strong will and good timing to propose some new and productive idea, the only important thing is it mustn’t be against the laws of the city. Of course, most of the laws were maid by the House of Mercator and, of course, they grant some special benefits to its business but thanks to the support of all the merchants of the city, it’s not difficult for the Prefect, who is also the ruler of the House of Mercator, takes under contriol the nobles’s families of Libidinis, which don’t always agree with the Prefect lines of conduction.
Of course, Signis always paid attention to satisfy requests coming from some very influent peoples who live in the city or just want to open an activity in it, so here it’s not unusual to see a brothel in the area nearby the dock and the shipyard. The first one was opened by a merchant who reached Libidinis from a city of the nearest Kingdom of Swabia, where his activity was not so well accepted, and soon another one was opened by another merchat coming from the the city of Rhoonas. Then, there was another one, till they became four, at last. Naturally, there were many polemics about those places, but the possibility to grant more money to the city and have more visitors who can be interessed in doing some trades before enjoying a night of passion, had made change the opinion to lot of peoples which weren’t in favor with the opening of those activities, at the begin.
It will fit!?
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I think it will, it wont effect my storyline, I am after all a visitor to the city and not aware or interested in the politics at this stage. If that changes, I can always fit around your description. My interest is the games and tournaments and making a sheckle or two till i move on to the next place...
Of course, in my story, there is a pack of established underground werewolves and lycan. Soon, the vampires may visit and decide to stay, but that just adds to the thrill of all the concoctions of folk - human, fantasy and hybrid who frequent this city of sex, debauchery and cunning..
The stories go on ... hehe
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Hmmmm, looks interesting
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Huragon - A dragon that can manifest at will into a human form.
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Bucca
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Werewolf
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Huragon....... would be cool
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If its not too much trouble would it be possible to get a brief outline of events?
nothing major just an overview of current events, otherwise might take me a week to read all those posts.
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A brief outline isn't easy, because any author wrote his personal line......I think you need to be patiente and read here and there, or start yours and then, see if you want to make your characters meet the others at some point